Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

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For legal issues, make a legal removal request.Shared0 filesMerriam-WebsterEMISSION Synonyms: 24 Similar and Opposite Words - Merriam-Websternoun * flow. * discharge. * flight. * emanation. * outflow. * effluence. * exodus. * emigration. * outpouring. * reflux. * drain. ...Thesaurus.comEMISSION Synonyms & Antonyms - 21 words | Thesaurus.comemission. [ih-mish-uhn] / ɪˈmɪʃ ən /. NOUN. issuance, diffusion. Synonyms. STRONGEST. discharge radiation. STRONG. ejaculation eje...Collins DictionaryEMISSION Synonyms | Collins English Thesaurus (2)Synonyms of the word "emission" include: * **Radiation** * **Discharge** * **Diffusion** * **Effluent** * **Exhalation** * **Effus...Collins DictionarySynonyms of EMISSION | Collins American English ThesaurusSynonyms of 'emission' in British English emission. 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Translations Definition Synonyms Pronunciation Examples Translator Phrasebook open...Show lessMerriam-WebsterEMISSION Synonyms: 24 Similar and Opposite Words - Merriam-Websternoun * flow. * discharge. * flight. * emanation. * outflow. * effluence. * exodus. * emigration. * outpouring. * reflux. * drain. ...sn._setImageSrc('img-TLaxaqqUKKmikdUPwseE-AM_cozd7s_21','data:image\/png;base64,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\x3d')sn._setImageSrc('img-TLaxaqqUKKmikdUPwseE-AM_cozd7s_24','data:image\/png;base64,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\x3d\x3d')Thesaurus.comEMISSION Synonyms & Antonyms - 21 words | Thesaurus.comemission. [ih-mish-uhn] / ɪˈmɪʃ ən /. NOUN. issuance, diffusion. Synonyms. STRONGEST. discharge radiation. 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Some people believe that it is because of the extinction of plants and animals, while others believe that there are some other severe reasons behind this. I agree with the view that some other environmental problems, like industrial waste and the usage of vehicles emitting carbon dioxide, are more prominent issues compared to the extinction of species.

Firstly, the rapid increase in population increases the need for homes, due to which many forests are being cut down, causing the extinction of plants and animals that feed on those. For instance, it is reported that even the largest forest, named Amazon, is now becoming smaller compared to the past. If this type of forest becomes extinct in the future, the death ratio and environmental issues will increase in the near future. Secondly, many animals that help in reducing environmental issues are being reduced every year; for example, penguins are now rarely found in northern regions.

However, I would argue that there are various other factors that are making the environment polluted, and one worth mentioning is the discharge of carbon dioxide from vehicles. Due to an increase in traffic, it is becoming difficult to control such emissions, resulting in hotter weather compared to the past. In addition to that, the ozone layer is becoming thinner day by day due to the burning of industrial waste. In my viewpoint, this is the major reason for enhancing environmental problems today.

In conclusion, although it is a common belief that due to the reduction in plant and animal species, a lot of environmental issues are being noticed, I personally believe that issues like the increase in carbon dioxide and industries are more notable. check it and score itHere is my evaluation and scoring of your essay based on the IELTS Academic Writing Task 2 criteria.Estimated Band Score: 6.0CriteriaScoreKey InsightsTask Achievement6.0You address both sides of the prompt and clearly state your position in the introduction and conclusion. However, your first body paragraph contains a logical contradiction regarding the prompt's premise.Coherence & Cohesion6.0The essay flows logically with clear paragraphing and good transition signals (Firstly, However, In addition to that). Some ideas could be linked more smoothly.Lexical Resource6.0You use appropriate vocabulary (environmental degradation, ozone layer, prominent issues). However, there is some repetition, and a few words are used incorrectly (e.g., death ratio).Grammatical Range & Accuracy6.0Your sentences are generally easy to understand, but there are a few recurring grammatical errors, particularly with relative clauses, tenses, and article usage.Detailed Feedback & Corrections1. Task Achievement & ContentThe Contradiction: The prompt asks you to discuss two views: (1) degradation is caused by extinction, vs. (2) degradation is caused by other reasons (like pollution). In your first body paragraph, you try to argue for the first view, but you state that deforestation (human activity) causes extinction. This actually supports the second view—that human actions, not the extinction itself, are the root cause of environmental degradation. To fix this, you should focus on how losing biodiversity itself damages ecosystems (e.g., breaking the food chain, loss of oxygen producers).Factual Accuracy: Keep in mind that penguins are native to the Southern Hemisphere (Antarctica), not northern regions. While examiners don't strictly grade your geographic facts, using accurate examples strengthens your argument.2. Grammar & Vocabulary ImprovementsHere are the key corrections for your body paragraphs:"...due to which many forests..." \[\rightarrow \] Correction: "...as a result of which many forests..." or "...which results in many forests being cut down...""...causing the extinction of plants and animals that feed on those." \[\rightarrow \] Correction: "...causing the extinction of plants and animals that depend on them.""...the death ratio and environmental issues will increase..." \[\rightarrow \] Correction: "...mortality rates will rise and environmental issues will worsen..." (Ratio is a mathematical relationship; worsen is better for issues than increase)."...are being reduced every year..." \[\rightarrow \] Correction: "...are declining every year...""...for enhancing environmental problems today." \[\rightarrow \] Correction: "...for exacerbating/worsening environmental problems today." (Enhancing usually means making something better, not worse).How to Elevate This Essay to a Band 7.0+Clarify the First View: Make sure you explain how the absence of animals/plants hurts the environment (e.g., "The extinction of apex predators disrupts entire ecosystems, leading to overpopulation of certain species and subsequent habitat destruction").Vary Your Vocabulary: Instead of repeating "environmental issues" and "problems," use terms like ecological crises, environmental degradation, pressing concerns, or sustainability challenges.Refine Complex Structures: Practice using conditional sentences or passive voice accurately to discuss future consequences.Would you like me to rewrite a specific paragraph of your essay to show you exactly how to restructure it for a Band 7.5 or higher? Copied to clipboardFailed to copy to clipboard. Try again later.CopiedFailed to copyCopyShare public linkThis public link shares a thread, which may include personal information. You can delete this link, but not copies made by others.Copy linkCan’t copy the link right now. Please try again later.FacebookGmailXRedditWhatsAppShareGood responseBad responseMoreExport to DocsDraft in GmailAbout this responseSaved timeClearHelpfulComprehensiveOtherIncorrectInappropriateNot workingUnhelpfulOtherA copy of this chat will be included.A copy of this chat and the content that you shared will be included.A copy of this chat and the content that you shared will be included.SubmitThanks for letting us knowGoogle may use account and system data to understand your feedback and improve our services, subject to our Privacy Policy and Terms of Service. For legal issues, make a legal removal request.Shared0 filesShow lessShow allgoogle.xsrf = google.xsrf || {};google.xsrf = {...google.xsrf,...{"ahxKmf":"AF5tSO5cO8GWb9qJrCtYh67L2qvnaOq8ag:[redacted phone]"}};google.xsrf = google.xsrf || {};google.xsrf = {...google.xsrf,...{"sYMMbb":"AF5tSO6rWDxQtBo7QxLFE8pm0_q-b9LCAQ:[redacted phone]"}}; CopiedCopyEditSome people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.AI Mode reply for Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.This is a classic IELTS Writing Task 2 Discussion and Opinion prompt. To help you see how to transform your initial ideas into a high-scoring response, here is a model essay structured for a Band 8.0+.Notice how this version clearly separates the two views, fixes the logical flow, and uses precise academic vocabulary without making factual errors about penguins.Model Band 8.0+ EssayIt is often debated whether the extinction of specific flora and fauna constitutes the most pressing ecological crisis of our era, or if other environmental challenges demand greater priority. While the loss of biodiversity severely disrupts natural ecosystems, I believe that overarching issues such as industrial pollution and carbon emissions present a far more immediate threat to global survival.On the one hand, proponents of prioritizing biodiversity argue that the disappearance of species creates a catastrophic domino effect. Every organism plays a distinct role in maintaining ecological balance. When a particular plant or animal becomes extinct, it disrupts the local food web, which can lead to the collapse of an entire ecosystem. For instance, the decline of marine predators like sharks can cause an overpopulation of smaller fish, leading to the depletion of vital seagrass beds. Furthermore, the destruction of large-scale ecosystems, such as the Amazon rainforest, removes crucial carbon sinks, ultimately accelerating global climate instability and threatening human survival.On the other hand, a stronger argument can be made for the supremacy of other man-made environmental crises, specifically industrial waste and vehicular pollution. The unchecked discharge of carbon dioxide from global transport networks has led to unprecedented global warming, manifesting in severe weather patterns and rising sea levels worldwide. Additionally, industrial activities continuously release toxic chemicals into the atmosphere and water supplies, which actively degrades the ozone layer and poisons fertile land. In my view, these issues are far more critical because they act as the root cause of environmental decay; if the planet's climate becomes entirely unlivable due to pollution, both humans and wildlife will perish regardless of individual conservation efforts.In conclusion, although the extinction of specific plants and animals significantly destabilises nature, it is ultimately a symptom of broader ecological neglect. I firmly believe that combating industrial emissions and greenhouse gases is a more urgent priority, as mitigating these overarching threats is the only way to safeguard the planet as a whole.Key Structural & Vocabulary Improvements Made:Fixed the Logic (Task Achievement): Instead of saying human activity causes extinction (which shifts the focus to human activity), Body Paragraph 1 now explains why extinction itself is a disaster (disrupted food webs, loss of carbon sinks).Stronger Vocabulary (Lexical Resource): Repetitive phrases like "environmental problems" were replaced with pressing ecological crisis, global climate instability, root cause of environmental decay, and mitigating overarching threats.Accurate Examples (Coherence): Replaced the penguin example with a scientifically accurate example of marine predators and food webs to make the argument look highly professional.Would you like to try writing an introduction for a different IELTS prompt to practice your thesis statement, or would you prefer to break down the grammar rules for using relative clauses (like "which" and "where") accurately? Copied to clipboardFailed to copy to clipboard. Try again later.CopiedFailed to copyCopyShare public linkThis public link shares a thread, which may include personal information. You can delete this link, but not copies made by others.Copy linkCan’t copy the link right now. Please try again later.FacebookGmailXRedditWhatsAppShareGood responseBad responseMoreExport to DocsDraft in GmailAbout this responseSaved timeClearHelpfulComprehensiveOtherIncorrectInappropriateNot workingUnhelpfulOtherA copy of this chat will be included.A copy of this chat and the content that you shared will be included.A copy of this chat and the content that you shared will be included.SubmitThanks for letting us knowGoogle may use account and system data to understand your feedback and improve our services, subject to our Privacy Policy and Terms of Service. For legal issues, make a legal removal request.Shared0 filesShow lessShow allgoogle.xsrf = google.xsrf || {};google.xsrf = {...google.xsrf,...{"ahxKmf":"AF5tSO7_ictYMkwHgJTd9nGCKoT5jEsHfw:[redacted phone]"}};google.xsrf = google.xsrf || {};google.xsrf = {...google.xsrf,...{"sYMMbb":"AF5tSO5sj4TD7BPIYTEcv_-iuaihIuLU5g:[redacted phone]"}};CopiedCopyEditbas band yh 6.5 jitna dei doAI Mode reply for bas band yh 6.5 jitna dei doAchieving a Band 6.5 is a very realistic and smart goal! To get a 6.5, you don't need a flawless vocabulary or complex medical examples. You just need clear logic, basic grammatical accuracy, and zero repetition. Here is a rewritten version of your essay tailored exactly to hit a Band 6.5. It keeps your original style and ideas but fixes the logical errors, fixes the penguin example, and cleans up the grammar so the examiner can easily follow your argument. Model Band 6.5 EssayIt is a common debate whether the extinction of specific plants and animals is the main environmental problem today, or if other ecological issues are more critical. While the loss of species damages natural ecosystems, I believe that industrial pollution and greenhouse gases from vehicles are much more serious threats to our planet. On the one hand, losing biodiversity can harm the environment significantly. Every plant and animal plays a role in keeping nature balanced. When a species goes extinct, it disrupts the food chain, which can cause other species to die out as well. For example, if large forests like the Amazon continue to shrink due to human activity, we lose vital trees that produce oxygen and absorb harmful gases. This disruption can worsen global weather patterns and make the planet less livable for all creatures. However, I would argue that other man-made factors are causing more immediate damage, particularly vehicular and industrial emissions. Due to the massive increase in traffic worldwide, vehicles discharge huge amounts of carbon dioxide daily, which is the primary cause of rising global temperatures. Furthermore, factories continuously dump toxic waste and release chemicals that thin the ozone layer. In my view, pollution is a more urgent issue because it directly alters the earth's climate. If the air and water become completely poisoned, it will kill both humans and wildlife. In conclusion, although the reduction of animal and plant species is a serious concern, I personally believe that issues like carbon emissions and industrial waste are more notable. We must focus on reducing pollution first, as it is the root cause of most environmental degradation today.

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Criterion	Band
Task Achievement / Task Response	5.5
Coherence and Cohesion	5.5
Lexical Resource	5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy	5.5
Overall	5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task, discussing both the loss of species and other environmental issues like industrial waste and vehicle emissions, while maintaining a clear position throughout. Relevant ideas are presented, such as habitat loss and carbon dioxide output. However, some ideas in the first body paragraph lack precision and shift slightly into general human impacts rather than strictly focusing on extinction itself as requested by the prompt. Despite this, the task is adequately fulfilled, meeting the criteria for a solid band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Information and ideas flow logically, supported by appropriate transition markers such as 'Firstly', 'However', 'In addition to that', and 'In conclusion'. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to separate different viewpoints. However, referencing and cohesive links are occasionally mechanical or slightly repetitive, preventing the response from reaching a higher band. Overall, the structural progression is clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The writer uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms such as 'environmental degradation', 'extinction of plants and animals', 'ozone layer', and 'industrial waste'. There are some attempts to use less common items, but occasional word choice and collocation inaccuracies occur, such as 'death ratio' instead of mortality rate or death toll, and 'enhancing environmental problems' where 'exacerbating' or 'worsening' would be more appropriate. Spelling and word choice errors do not impede communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and conditional structures. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings throughout, such as 'due to which many forests are being cut down' and 'animals that help in reducing environmental issues are being reduced every year'. Punctuation and basic grammar are generally controlled, and although errors persist, they rarely impede communication, placing the response firmly at band 6.0.

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