Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In these days environment are very important .Although every where is too much poulltion, people think some say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. mainly , in my way loss of species of plants and animals serious cause.

firstly, In additionally loss of plants and animals create a problem of environment. however, if plants are less they cannot purify the oxygen. its harmful of environment. and same as loss of animals food chain are disturb.

Secondly, some people says that environmental problem .my opinion is grow new plants to envirnoment and time taking to improve species of plants. Again main problem is increasing pollution every where to stop these pollution less use of cars and grow plants.

In my conclusion , main environmental problems are pollution , not growing new plants and harmful atmosphere.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, coming in at only 146 words. This severely restricts the student's ability to fully address all parts of the task. While the student attempts to discuss the loss of species and pollution, the ideas are heavily curtailed, repetitive, and lack sufficient development or supporting examples. The writer's position is somewhat discernible in phrases like "in my way loss of species of plants and animals serious cause", but it is not well-developed or sustained throughout. Furthermore, the alternative view regarding other environmental problems is only briefly and awkwardly touched upon. Due to the under-length nature of the response and the limited, underdeveloped ideas, this performance aligns closely with Band 4 descriptors for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is divided into short paragraphs, attempting to structure an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the overall organization lacks logical progression and clarity. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as "firstly, In additionally" and "however, if plants are less". Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought between sentences. For example, transitions like "same as loss of animals food chain are disturb" fail to link ideas smoothly. While there is a basic attempt to group ideas into paragraphs, the inadequate and misused cohesive devices, combined with a lack of overall progression, mean the response falls firmly into Band 4.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student relies on simple words like "environment", "problem", "plants", and "animals" multiple times, often with basic spelling and collocation errors (e.g., "poulltion" instead of pollution, "envirnoment"). Attempts to use less common or academic vocabulary are largely unsuccessful or nonexistent. The limited range and frequent lexical errors frequently strain the reader's understanding and impede communication, reflecting the characteristics of a Band 4 performance for Lexical Resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of short, simple sentences that often contain severe structural errors. There is a near-total absence of accurate complex structures. Frequent grammatical errors include missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and faulty sentence construction, such as "In these days environment are very important" and "its harmful of environment". Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic. These persistent errors frequently distort meaning and cause significant difficulty for the reader, placing this response at Band 4 for Grammatical Range and Accuracy.

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