Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

For my prespective, it is agrued that the loss of plants and animals they can really effect their envoirnment problem like climate change and futhermore rain. however they also have numerous dramback mostky people say cut their forest and build their buildings.

Firstly, mostly people cutting down trees and killing animals they can biggest loss for himself because they can cutting down trees they really effect their enviornment like climates changes and raining. deforestation can less provide oxygen so many people died. Futhermore people killed the animals however there don't know animals and plants helps to makes the medicine. For instances, In past 10 years, people more than million animals kill and cutthing down plants so they drawbacks envoirnment prolems climate change and to makes the medicine.

In addition, mostly people notify the cutting down trees and plants so they can easily build more tall appartment blocks. Goverment can built the big buildings in one place so they can provide effortless electricity, water connections, in addtion public transport and nearby markets and other physical sports grounds provide in one space. For example Tokyo and Paris can build the big appartment there can millions people stay in small places.

In conclusion, for my prespective, people truely says that the main problem of cutting down trees and killing animals can effect their climate clouds and also drawbacks less provide oxygen therefore many people died and aslo have some advantages goverment can cut their forest they can build tall appartment blocks then numerous people stay in one place.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address all parts of the prompt by discussing the loss of species and other environmental problems, as well as providing an opinion. However, the development of ideas is severely limited and unclear. For instance, the student mentions that 'animals and plants helps to makes the medicine' and that cutting down trees leads to 'climate clouds'. While a position is stated in the introduction ('For my prespective...') and reiterated in the conclusion, the arguments are repetitive and lack sufficient support or extension. Because the ideas are underdeveloped and the reasoning is often difficult to follow, this performance aligns closely with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Paragraphing is attempted, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall organisation lacks a clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as starting sentences repetitively with 'mostly people' or relying on mechanical transitions like 'Firstly' and 'In addition' without creating smooth links between ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard to follow the relationships between sentences. These issues place the response firmly at Band 4.0 for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by severe word choice and spelling errors (e.g., 'prespective' instead of perspective, 'agrued', 'envoirnment', 'dramback', 'mostky', 'cuttings'). There are very few attempts at less common lexical items, and when they are attempted, inaccuracies cause confusion for the reader, such as 'climate clouds' or 'physical sports grounds provide in one space'. The limited range and frequent errors that strain the reader indicate a Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of faulty simple and attempted complex sentences. There are pervasive grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('animals and plants helps', 'people ... is agrued'), tense confusion ('In past 10 years, people more than million animals kill'), and severe punctuation and structural flaws. The frequency of errors frequently distorts meaning and causes difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 4.0 descriptors.

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