Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this topic some people argued that because of environment problem we loss particular species of plants and animal and a group of people says that there are more important environmental problems. So. First of all we discuss regarding the people who says that because of environmental problem we loss particular species of plants and animal. However, they are true because in urban areas there are alot of pollution, and one of the most essential that are not good fot plants or animals is air pollution and water pollution. In addition, because of water pollution plants not grow properly and people of urban areas are so careless regarding urban planting.On the other side, factories and alot of industrial works are the caused of air pollution and not safe for animals or birds. one more thing i must be add is the dirt around over home towns people are so unkind with animal they don't care about the cats and dogs who are in their socities they put theri broken glass into trash without even knowing that this is so harmful for them. alot of newspaper says that put your broekn glass into a rapper and cover them properly that don't ahrm animals who are wandering around. If people anderstand this thing so most of animals will be safe

Now, dicuss about the people who says that there are more important environment problem they also true. If i'm taking about the real incident of my own country the major issue is here is flooding, dams, sewerage problem and i am disscussing each one

In moon soon season, alot of rain happens and northen area damge every year, river water incraese beacuse of rain andthen flood happens. Every year alot of people died just because of this and the main issue behind this dams. due to not proper managment of dams every year alot of people suffer from died, injured and lost their homes in flood and homeless.Sewerage problem is one of the biggest problem all over the country. due to bad sawarage system there is alot of dirt and it cause people are suffuring from bad health and dirty environment.

In conclusion, According to my perspective i stand with the peope who are saying that there are more other problems because if these problems should be fix most of the problems automatically fixed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—the loss of specific species as the main environmental problem versus other more pressing environmental issues—and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on plant and animal loss relies heavily on general statements about pollution and broken glass without deeper elaboration. Similarly, the discussion of alternative environmental problems focuses on flooding and sewerage problems in the writer's home country. While relevant examples are provided, the support tends to be anecdotal rather than thoroughly extended. Overall, the task is addressed, placing the response at a Band 5.5 level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text demonstrates some overall organisation, but the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by poor paragraphing, fragmented sentences, and abrupt transitions such as 'Now, dicuss about the people...'. Cohesive devices are often basic, repetitive, or inaccurate, and referencing is at times unclear. Paragraph boundaries do not always follow logical shifts in topic, making the structure feel somewhat disjointed. Although there is an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, the lack of smooth links and mechanical errors in cohesion limit the overall readability. This performance aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, featuring frequent word-choice errors and non-standard collocations (e.g., 'environment problem', 'alot of pollution', 'suffuring from bad health'). There are also several spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'loss' used as a verb ('we loss'), 'phot' instead of 'phot', 'mandagment', 'sawarage', and 'moon soon'. While the writer attempts some less common terms like 'industrial works' and 'managment', the persistent inaccuracies in spelling and word formation cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is limited, relying heavily on simple sentences and frequent attempts at complex structures that are often faulty and ungrammatical (e.g., 'because of environment problem we loss particular species', 'If i'm taking about the real incident of my own country the major issue is here is flooding', and 'due to not proper managment of dams every year alot of people suffer from died'). Punctuation is also weak, with missing commas and misused capitalisation. Frequent errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and clause structure cause considerable difficulty for the reader, placing this response firmly at Band 4.5.

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