Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Fewer folks argue that the main environmental problem of modern time is losing of certain species like flora and fauna.Others states that there are huge environmental damages.In this essay will discuss the main views and provide an opinion in the end.

In this present era there is rapid growth of technology, population, manufacturing of machines etc.The human life had implemented a lot is various works,has the things changing the civilization of mankind are losing the nature such as agricultural land for farming,forest trees etc.This sectors are main backbone of the plants and animals in order to balance the nature and to maintain a scale size in the food chain but people are started to demolish the forest land into modern houses to live in and killing the wildlife to prevent from the life threat .This will leads to imbalance the ecosystem and become very huge animals are survive with lack of food.

On the otherhand,there are other environmental problems such as global warming, deforestation,air and water pollution which is very deadly situation to the livingthings on the earth in order prevent this problem the government and organisations should take the initial responsibility and start the various campaign and rally and aslo instead of using plastic things it need to replace the things with clay and soil things which is very beneficial to the human lives and this ecosystem.To prevent from environmental problems.

Take an example, in Japan the people are using the carry bags which is made with the dried skin of fruit and vegetables in order to maintain a healthy life and to support the nature.And using fire in kitchen to cook it obtained from the animal waste such as cows,etc .Instead of using oils has a fuels

In my opinion i strongly report that there are more environmental problems rather than

losing of plants and animals.And mankind is responsibility to protect the environment for a better life style.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the main parts of the task by discussing both views on environmental problems and providing an opinion, which places the effort in this band. However, the treatment of the ideas remains limited and under-developed. For instance, the introduction states that 'loss of certain species' is a primary concern, but the supporting arguments in the second paragraph quickly transition into general descriptions of habitat loss without thoroughly explaining why plant and animal loss specifically constitutes the main problem. The writer's position is discernible by the conclusion where they state they 'strongly report that there are more environmental problems', yet the ideas lack extension and sufficient support. To move higher, the response would need to fully develop both viewpoints with extended explanations and clearer, more coherent examples rather than relying on brief and generalised statements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation evident in the text, with an attempt to structure the essay into an introduction, body paragraphs addressing each viewpoint, and a conclusion. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, making the sequence of ideas feel somewhat disjointed. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or overused, such as starting sentences abruptly with 'On the otherhand,there are other...' or using loose additive links like 'And' and 'Aslo' without proper integration into the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs suffers from run-on sentences and missing transitional logic. To improve, the writer should ensure that ideas flow logically from one sentence to the next using accurate and varied cohesive ties, and structure paragraphs so that each has a distinct, well-managed central theme.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, containing noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and collocation that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Phrases such as 'losing of certain species like flora and fauna' demonstrate inaccurate word forms, and expressions like 'scale size in the food chain' or 'killing the wildlife to prevent from the life threat' show awkward collocations. Spelling slips and improper word choices, such as 'has a fuels' instead of 'as fuels', further restrict the score. To achieve a higher band, the student must expand their lexical repertoire to include less common vocabulary used with precision, while eliminating basic errors in word formation and ensuring natural phrasing throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical structure of the writing demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences or faulty attempts at complex ones. Frequent errors in grammar and punctuation are present throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies, missing articles ('in Japan the people are using the carry bags'), incorrect prepositions, and faulty subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'animals are survive', 'people are started'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and periods. These frequent errors often cause difficulty for the reader. To progress, the student needs to build a better control over basic sentence patterns, ensure correct verb forms and agreement, and increase the frequency of error-free sentences by avoiding overly convoluted or incorrectly constructed complex clauses.

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