Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Today the animal and plants is the most important role of our life, they are provide many species. Few indviduals say that the major social cause of our time period is the lack of specific kinds of plants and animals. Others say that there are more crucial social causes. This essay will be discuss both prespectives before give my opinion.

To begin with, some people say that increse the problem in society, due to the lack of animal and plant species. Many types of plant is less, and due to the oxygen is decrese day by day. For example, the plants species is less due to the oxygen lack, due to this people face to lot of difficulties about the health. However the different kinds of animal is less day by day. The animal species are lack, and people demand the milk, butter and yogurt. For instance, the species is not provide the people due to the effect on social life.

In addition, peopel say that other problem effect on environment. The indviduals say the pollution is main cause and effect on social life. Such as, pollution is harmful impact on people and impact on health. Moreover, lot of traffics is impact on the environmental problems. The car is provide harmful gases on roads and harmful for people. For example, citizens visit to the market shop ,and face the lot of traffics due car gases is harmful impact on indviduals.

In conclusion, the animals and plants is most significant for people life, they provide lot of species, and the pollution is harmful impact on people about health.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts both sides of the question: it discusses the loss of plant and animal species, then pollution and traffic, and it includes examples such as reduced oxygen and harmful vehicle gases. However, the discussion is only partial and the ideas are often unclear or insufficiently explained. For instance, the claim that fewer animal species mean people cannot obtain “milk, butter and yogurt” does not clearly explain how species loss causes this problem. The conclusion also does not give a clear, reasoned opinion about which environmental problems are more important; it mainly repeats that plants, animals and pollution affect people. State your position directly and develop each main point with a clear cause-and-effect explanation. (The response meets the required length; 10 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Basic signposting such as “To begin with,” “In addition,” and “In conclusion” helps readers identify the sections. However, there is no clear progression within several paragraphs: ideas are repeated or placed beside one another without showing how they connect. For example, the first body paragraph moves from plant loss and oxygen to health, then to animal products, but the links between these points are not made clear. The examples introduced by “For example” and “For instance” often repeat or confuse the preceding claim. Use fewer points, connect each explanation explicitly to its main idea, and make the conclusion follow from the comparison in the body.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a basic range of topic vocabulary, including “species,” “pollution,” “oxygen,” “environmental problems,” and “harmful gases,” so the general subject is usually identifiable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow. “Social cause” is used where the task concerns environmental problems, while “the animal species are lack” and “provide many species” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “indviduals,” “increse,” “prespectives,” and “peopel.” Build a more accurate set of environmental terms and check spelling; also choose precise phrases such as “decline in species” and “vehicle emissions” rather than repeating broad words like “problem” and “impact.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and linking structures, but sentence forms are limited and errors are frequent enough to make several relationships unclear. Examples include “the animal and plants is,” “they are provide,” and “This essay will be discuss,” which show problems with agreement and verb forms. The sentence “Many types of plant is less, and due to the oxygen is decrese day by day” also has faulty clause construction, making the intended cause-and-effect relationship difficult to understand. Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries are inconsistent as well. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “which,” or “as a result.” Proofread each sentence for a clear subject, correctly formed verb, and complete clause.

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