Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

INTRODUCTION:

This chat gaves two statement some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is loss of particular species of plnts and animals. some says that there are more environmental problems. but i am completely agree with first point because plant increase the beauty of environment.

Paragraph 1

Its most important reason that plants provide oxygen to human when i break and finish the plants so its create a big problem for human oxygen and animal also perform good things for environment like when snake breath through out side so many germs finish through the snake breath. while the urine of many animals used for growth for crops and these increase the pretty of environment so many dirty roots that out from eath randomly so animals eats these roots and clear the dirty from environment.

Paragraph 2

Additionally, plants also rise the pretty of environment and those that contain many plants and trees there weather of this environment of very well and most important thing that the plants finish the air pollution if plants will less then the air pollution are increase these place and animals is also participate to clean the environment many medicine are created by plants that save from many environmental deseases plants provide fresh air for environment

Conculusion

Plants is important for environment because its provide fresh air and oxygen for the environment and also rise the beauty of environment and animals finish dirty plants and there urinium to use the growth of plants and trees .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a position in the introduction—“I am completely agree with first point”—and give reasons related to plants and animals, including oxygen, pollution, and crops. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and your response focuses almost entirely on why plants and animals matter; it does not explain what other environmental problems might be more important or why. Several supporting claims, such as snakes removing germs through their breath, are unclear or unsupported, so the ideas are not sufficiently developed. The response is also 8 words below the required 250-word minimum. To improve, explain both sides, make your opinion precise, and support each main point with a clear, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly group related points about plants and animals. You also use basic linking expressions such as “Additionally” and “because.” However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow: the first moves from oxygen to snake breath, animal urine, and crop growth without showing how these points connect. Some references, including “these” and “its,” are unclear, and the conclusion repeats earlier claims rather than bringing the discussion together. Use one central idea per paragraph, order supporting details logically, and add clear links between claims and examples.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “oxygen,” “air pollution,” “crops,” and “environmental diseases,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is basic and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “plants,” “environment,” and “pretty.” There are also frequent spelling and word-choice problems, such as “plnts,” “deseases,” “rise the pretty,” and “finish the air pollution,” which make some meanings difficult to understand. Aim for more precise environmental vocabulary and check spelling carefully. For example, describe plants as improving air quality or supporting biodiversity rather than saying they “finish” pollution.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using connectors such as “because,” “when,” and “if,” and the reader can identify your general position. However, sentence structures are often inaccurate, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries regularly obscure meaning. Examples include “I am completely agree,” “plants provide oxygen to human,” and “the air pollution are increase.” Some long sentences combine several claims without clear punctuation, making their relationships hard to follow. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with one clear main clause and correctly formed supporting clauses.

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