Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent years, there are varities of environmental problems, these problems are negatively effecting both physical and mental health such as air poollution, somking and load shading. Some people say that, the important environmental of our time is the loss of specific species of plant and animals.I will disscus both views, these views will support my concept.

In the starting, the breeds of plans and animals are very important for our environmental system in addition they play a fundamental role in our daliy lives like provide the breath gas, natural beauty of prominent location also fresh milk and wearing winter collection from aniimals. Firstly, the species of plants and animals could not our time loss because they must provide fresh air and fresh food. Nowadays, many goverment are eliminating trees in all around the world however they are considering new sites for their citizens.

Secondly, other people say that, there are varities of problems accessible in our ecological systems, these issuses unfortunately damage both people health and nature species. The air pollution one of the biggest problem all aound the world.

This is a really significant for all organizations for instance humankind, plants and different types of animals breeds.

From my point of view, the transportation is another problem in my country as a various of all vehicle. There is a lot of fumes widespread our surrounding, this problem

detrimental impacts our enivronment like breathes, loudly sounds due to this problem.

To sum up, many people say that, our time loss due to particular plants and animals breeds. We should focus on many problems, thses isuses are not good for health and envrionmental system.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to discuss both views and give a personal opinion, so the response is recognisably connected to the question. However, the two positions are not explained clearly or developed with relevant support. The paragraph about species mentions their roles in providing food and fresh air, but the claim that they “could not our time loss” is difficult to understand and does not explain why species loss is the main problem. The discussion of other environmental problems focuses briefly on air pollution, while your opinion shifts to vehicle fumes without comparing its importance with biodiversity loss. To strengthen the response, explain each view directly, give a specific example, and state a clear, consistent position supported by reasons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly” and “To sum up” show an attempt to organise the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from species’ importance to tree removal and government plans without explaining the connection. Some linking phrases are repetitive or do not express a clear relationship, and references such as “these views” and “this problem” can be difficult to follow. The conclusion repeats the topic but does not clearly bring together the two sides or your opinion. Build each paragraph around one main point, then connect its explanation and example explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “environmental system,” “species,” “air pollution” and “transportation,” which helps identify the subject. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate word choices, collocations and spellings strain the reader’s understanding. Examples include “breath gas,” “wearing winter collection,” “fumes widespread our surrounding” and “breathes”; these do not express the intended ideas naturally. Repeated use of “problem” and “varieties” also limits precision. Learn common environmental collocations and check spelling and word forms. For example, describe plants as producing oxygen, animals as providing food or materials, and vehicle emissions as affecting air quality.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including “Some people say that…” and “From my point of view…”. However, grammatical control is limited, and frequent errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to recover. For example, “the important environmental of our time is the loss” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “the species … could not our time loss” has an incomplete verb pattern. Other examples include “The air pollution one of the biggest problem” and “this problem detrimental impacts our environment,” where sentence structure and agreement are faulty. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences, using articles and plural forms accurately, and punctuating clauses so that each idea is clear.

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