Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some individuals argue that the significant environmental issue of our time is the loss of particular species such as plants and animals.On the other hand other say that there are more important environmental problems.

I beleive that we should keep to focus on our activities. It is our duty to protect the environment of world. Most of the animals and birds dead with dirty environment. Pollution is more harmful for our respiratory system. In daily routine life every person do not try to save environment. This is because of our activities. people through waste material in streets and in free space.Furthermore, we cut trees and all the green feild of wild. after cutting trees we make furniture and other goods. By hold this process the amount of trees reduce in wild.So this is the big reason of death of wildlife animals. In the three are many factories and industries for the use of humans. But the wastage of factories through in rivers and streams. So the chemicals go top the body of fishes and other water species. The main reason of endangered species is hunting. Government should ban the hunting of wildlife animals.

On the other hand, most citizens say that environmental problems are necessary in life. They beleive that they get many benefits from wood of trees. They make furniture and walls from wood. They think that industries and factories are more important than birds and animals.

In conclusion environmental problems are the main reason of endangered species. Due to pollution all the birds and animals are affected. Government should ban the hunting of willife animals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the topic and give a relevant view that human activity and pollution harm wildlife, with examples involving tree cutting, factory waste and hunting. However, the discussion of the two views is uneven: the first is developed through several causes, while the opposing view is reduced to people benefiting from wood and industries being more important. Your own position is also difficult to identify precisely; “we should keep to focus on our activities” does not clearly state what action or priority you support. The conclusion repeats the link between pollution and endangered species rather than resolving which environmental problems matter most. Make your position explicit and explain why the competing problems should be prioritised or addressed together. The response meets the stated length requirement; 17 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic overall structure, with an opening, a paragraph about human impacts, a paragraph presenting the opposing view, and a conclusion. The reader can follow the broad topic, and connectors such as “Furthermore” and “On the other hand” signal some relationships. However, ideas within the main paragraph are crowded together, and the progression from pollution to litter, deforestation, factories and hunting is not clearly organised. Several links are mechanical or unclear, including “So this is the big reason” and “By hold this process.” The opposing view is brief and does not connect clearly to your own position. Use separate, focused paragraphs for each view, develop one or two points in a logical order, and make references and transitions more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “pollution,” “factories,” “chemicals,” “endangered species” and “hunting,” so the central subject is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or imprecise, and some word combinations make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “dirty environment,” “free space,” “green feild of wild” and “wastage of factories” do not express the intended environmental ideas naturally. There are also spelling errors such as “beleive,” “feild” and “willife.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for habitat loss, industrial discharge and species decline, and check spelling carefully. More precise wording would help you explain the causes and consequences without relying on repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and some longer sentences, and the basic meaning is often recoverable. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “other say,” “every person do not try,” “we cut trees and all the green feild,” and “the amount of trees reduce,” where agreement, verb forms or sentence construction are faulty. The sentence “But the wastage of factories through in rivers and streams” is especially difficult to interpret because its structure is incomplete. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in “animals.On the other hand” and “wild. after cutting.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete sentence patterns before adding longer clauses, then proofread sentence boundaries.

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