Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

First of all i would like to start this by saying that everyone perceive world from different angles.

Loss of particular species and animals:

Yes , with big wrenching heart i will have to accept this that there are some species of plants and animals are at extinct level. In orde to preserve the beauty of our society it is neccesary to save plants.Now i would like to talk about animal species there are some animals who are extinct level.Like some deer and other than that they must be preserve because these things are here to enhance the beauty and nature of our environment.

Important environmental problems:

First foremost is Air quality there country in which we live have very high Aqi(Air quality index).

Air pollution like smoke, waste of different gases which causes dieases like Cancer, Sore throat,Asthma.

Noise pollution:

It has become very serious issue in our country the sounds of cars,traffic make ine very annoy.

Water Pollution:

It is also important issue drain water , industrial waste when expose into sea it overall harms environment and speices living in the sea. There is shortage of fresh water in our country .

Global Warming:

It has affected our environment badly sea levels are rising ,Glaciers are melting and turnnig into floods,which cause destructions in our environemt.

Green house effects ,Depletion of ozone layer.So i would conclude first deal with unavoidable problems along that focus on preservation of species of plants and animals.Because maintainning balance between them is essential.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the question: you mention the loss of plant and animal species, then discuss air, noise and water pollution, global warming and related concerns. Your conclusion also gives a position—that urgent environmental problems should be dealt with while species are protected. However, the discussion is only partial: the species section is brief and its examples (“some deer”) are unclear, while the other problems are mostly listed rather than explained or supported. The response would be stronger if you compared the seriousness of species loss with one or two other problems and explained why you consider those more urgent. Develop specific examples and make your opinion clear from the introduction through to the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

Headings such as “Loss of particular species and animals” and “Important environmental problems” help signal the two sides, and the conclusion attempts to bring them together. However, the response has no clear paragraph progression: several topics appear as short, separate labels, including “Noise pollution” and “Water Pollution,” rather than as connected paragraphs. Linking phrases such as “First of all” and “So” are used, but relationships between ideas are often not explained, and the list of environmental problems feels repetitive. Organise the essay into an introduction, a developed paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. Use linking expressions to show cause, contrast and comparison, and make references such as “these things” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “air pollution,” “industrial waste,” “sea levels,” “Glaciers” and “ozone layer,” so the reader can identify the environmental issues you mean. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “big wrenching heart,” “at extinct level,” “enhance the beauty,” and “make ine very annoy.” Spelling errors, including “neccesary,” “dieases” and “turnnig,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural environmental vocabulary and check spelling carefully. For example, describe species as “endangered” or “at risk of extinction,” and explain that pollution “causes respiratory illnesses” rather than relying on broad or awkward phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer structures, for example “drain water, industrial waste when expose into sea it overall harms environment,” and uses a few simple sentences to present separate issues. However, the range is limited, and many sentences contain errors in agreement, verb forms, articles or sentence construction. Examples include “everyone perceive,” “there are some species … are at extinct level,” and “when expose into sea.” Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, which makes some ideas harder to follow. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with clauses using “because,” “which” and “although.” Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and review articles and plural forms before submitting.

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