Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

As far as this topic is concerned, I would like to say that the impact of enviromental problem has always been debatable and has now become more controversial, with many people cliaming that enviromental prblem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. while other believe that there are more important enviromental problems. The substanial influence of this trend has sparked contrioversy over its potential impact in recent years.

From my prespective, enviromental problems occur due to air polution, polutions from factories, polution from the cars and other human activities. and it is a loss of plants, animals and humans. because of this enviroment we are not safe and it creates health issues. This esay will further eloborate on my views regarding enviromental problems and will lead to a logical conclusion.

Analyze the statement further, the primary reason behind enviromental problem is air polution which affect our enviroment and many people and animals are affected by this enviroment and they have some health issues also animals are not safe as well, so we can reduce air polution by plant trees. Categorically discussing, it cannot be ignored that if affect the people's health. This is mainly because, nowadays many people's are careless and they use personal cars more for short journey and it create polution from cars. so we always use bycyle for a short journey.

Moving further, it is a pertinent to mention that other people's think that this is the loss of particular species of plants and animal, i am agree with this.

To Encapsulate, I would like to conclude that we avoid to use our personal cars and for a short journey we prefer public transport and bycyles. It makes aour enviromental healthier and species and plants are safe and humans also live healthier life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify air pollution and the loss of species, and you give a personal view that pollution from cars and other human activity harms people and wildlife. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the species-loss perspective receives only one brief sentence: “I am agree with this.” You do not explain why people consider species loss the main environmental problem or support that view with an example. Your discussion of other environmental problems is also general, focusing mainly on air pollution and health effects rather than comparing its importance with biodiversity loss. To strengthen the response, explain each viewpoint with a reason and a relevant example, then state clearly which problem you consider more important and why.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can identify the broad topics of pollution and species loss. However, ideas are not arranged in a consistently logical progression: the first body paragraph presents your view, the next develops air pollution, and the paragraph on species loss ends without explanation or connection to your position. Several linking expressions, such as “Categorically discussing” and “Moving further,” do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. Sentence boundaries are also often unclear, as in “and it is a loss of plants, animals and humans. because of this enviroment…” Plan one paragraph for each view, use clear links to compare them, and make the conclusion follow directly from that comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “air pollution,” “health issues,” “species,” and “public transport,” so the reader can generally understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “environmental problems,” “pollution,” and “health issues.” Frequent spelling errors—such as “enviromental,” “polution,” and “prespective”—also make the writing less clear and weaken control of vocabulary. Some expressions are unnatural or imprecise, including “the impact of environmental problem” and “it makes our environmental healthier.” Build a more varied set of accurate terms for biodiversity and pollution, and check spelling and collocations carefully. For example, describe effects as “damage to ecosystems” or “harmful emissions,” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because” and “which.” However, the range remains limited, and complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow. Errors include subject–verb agreement in “air pollution which affect,” an incomplete construction in “I am agree with this,” and incorrect sentence boundaries in “and it is a loss… because of this environment…”. There are also problems with articles, plurals and sentence capitalization, such as “many people's” and the lowercase “while” after a full stop. These errors recur and sometimes obscure the intended relationships between ideas. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected supporting clause, then proofread agreement, articles and punctuation.

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