Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this modern era, increasing the enviromental problems day by day and had reach to new height. Some people think that main enviromental problems of our time forget of specific plants and animals. While other believed that there are more problem caused by plants and animals. In my opinion, causes of more enviromental problem due to this we loss of particular plants and some kinds of animals.

On the one hand,one the main reason of enviromental problem because we lost of natural plants and animals. First, more issues especally air pollution due to large number of vechicle now move in cites area. Trees one of the main source of obserbing carbondioxide, most of the people now days, cutting trees for our personal use, due to this increase the air pollutions because and damage of our healthe conditions. Many of the animals, eat uneusual food this activites can prevent to protect soil pollution and increase life span.

On the other hand, in some terms trees and animals can make bade enviromental condition. one the main idea how to animal effects on enviroment, Suchas more animals can leave their dung any where. They can directely effects on air pollutions because a virus live in dung for a long time. They can effest on human healths. For instance, people can walk in open areas ehere this virous was directly placed in our body and start damagaging our good healths.

In conclusion, although increase the enviromental mproblem because people cutting tree and killing animals for important it, while in some case tree leaves and animal dung is effects on enviromental problems.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to discuss both views and give your opinion, and the essay has a relevant focus on species loss, pollution and environmental effects. However, the response does not clearly explain the view that other environmental problems are more important: the second body paragraph instead argues that animals and trees themselves can cause problems, which does not directly address the comparison in the prompt. Your opinion is also difficult to identify consistently. The opening links environmental problems to losing species, but the conclusion introduces tree-cutting and animal dung without clearly stating which view you consider more important. Develop each side with a clear reason and a relevant example, then state your position directly and maintain it throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable essay structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of how the discussion is organised. However, progression between ideas is often unclear, and linking phrases do not always show a logical relationship. For example, the point about animals eating unusual food appears in the paragraph about air pollution without explaining the connection. The second body paragraph also shifts from the task’s comparison to animal dung and disease. Use topic sentences that directly express each paragraph’s main argument, and connect examples to that argument with clear explanations. Check that pronouns such as “they” have an unmistakable reference.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “air pollution,” “carbon dioxide,” “natural plants and animals,” and “human health,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and many word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “forget of specific plants,” “more problem caused by plants and animals,” and “increase the air pollutions” do not express the ideas clearly. Spelling errors, including “enviromental,” “vechicle,” and “virous,” also reduce accuracy. Build a reliable set of environmental terms and practise them in natural combinations, such as “loss of biodiversity,” “habitat destruction,” and “vehicle emissions.” Review spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including cause-and-effect constructions with “because” and “due to,” and you use paragraph-opening phrases to organise the discussion. However, grammatical control is weak: errors are frequent and sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For example, “increasing the environmental problems day by day and had reach to new height” lacks a clear subject and has an incorrect verb form, while “Trees one of the main source” is missing a verb and has faulty agreement. There are also problems with articles, plurals and sentence boundaries, as in “one the main reason” and “They can effest on human healths.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking verb forms, agreement and punctuation.

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