Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of perticular species of plants and animals.Others say that there are more important environmental problem.This essay will discuss both perpective before my own opinion.

On the one hand,some people believed that environmental problem of our main reason loss of particular species of plants and animals.While,past years more than plants and animals all trees and house take care of village peoples,but now a days most of the people disposed for plant and trees so that automatically animals death without food for trees and plant.As a result,trees give a good oxigen and shadow all peoples.Some environmental problem also face all the people live,for example not proper rain and waters very small amount taken the village and city.So,plant and animals loss the environmental problem one of the part reason.

On the second hand,Other people say that more important environmental problems.While,major impact of environmental problem increased pollution level.For example,transportation and plastic is the major problem in the environmental.The transportation recendly increased most of the country,so that pollution level also increased.Air afect of pollution and plastic impact in rain and dry soil in the earth.Plastic major impact earth so people afected in environmental probelms.

In conclusion,Some people saty that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals.Others say that there are more important environmental problems.In my own opinion for both statement i believed in the invironmental problems.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You introduce both views and give an opinion, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is minimal and the final position—“for both statement i believed in the invironmental problems”—does not clearly say which view you support or explain why. The examples about tree loss, pollution, transport and plastic are mentioned but not developed into clear reasons or specific evidence. The response also contains 186 words, below the required 250; the 63 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. This limits how fully you can address both sides. To improve, explain each view with a clear cause-and-effect example, then state and justify your own position directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the intended parts of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and linking phrases are repetitive or inaccurately used. For example, “On the second hand” and repeated openings with “While” do not connect the ideas naturally, while “So” is used to introduce conclusions without making the relationship clear. The conclusion largely repeats the prompt rather than bringing the argument together. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, arrange supporting details in a logical order, and use a smaller range of accurate links such as “Furthermore” or “As a result.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “species,” “pollution,” “transportation,” “plastic,” and “environmental problem,” which makes the subject recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and inaccurate word choice or spelling sometimes makes meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “pollution level,” “plastic impact earth,” and “animals death without food for trees and plant” are not expressed naturally or precisely. There are also spelling errors, including “perticular,” “oxigen,” and “invironmental.” Build a more accurate set of environmental collocations and check spelling carefully. For instance, describe “rising pollution levels,” “plastic pollution damaging soil,” or “habitat loss threatening wildlife.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic connectors to show cause and result, as in “The transportation recendly increased most of the country, so that pollution level also increased.” However, sentence structures are limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation make several ideas hard to interpret. For example, “some people believed that environmental problem of our main reason loss” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “Other people say that more important environmental problems” is incomplete. Commas are often missing after introductory phrases, and sentences run together. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “which,” and “as a result.”

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