Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays,environmental problem are incresing day by day.thaugh, Some individual thinks that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of some species of plants and animals. Whereas, others belives that there are more important environmental problem.These two claim will disscuss in furthere.

Firstly, Some people thinks that in our time the main environmetal problem is the loss of some species of plants and animals. Because, in this era we always use fossil fuel and it creates pollutions in the environment and it is dangerous for living beings such as animals and also some plants.Moreover, human cuttings the forest for build industries or construct the city. Forest is a home for many species and there are many kind of different plants that we don't know which is usefull for us. For example, vehicle and deforestation.Thus, it is clear that the main problem of our time is the loss of perticular species of plants and animals.

Secondly, few individual belives that the main problem is envirmental problem. Air and water is very important for us not only for human but also plants and animal. Because, if we get pure water and air so we can living our healthy life and if not we easily suffer in some deases.For example, Cholera,Dangue and many more dangerous issues.Thus, it is clear that there are more important environmental problem.

To sum up, bothe are very important environmental problem.In my opinion I supported The more important environmental problem. Because it is general necessity for living beings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state your preference in the conclusion, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only partial: the first view is linked to fossil fuels and deforestation, while the second is mainly asserted through the importance of clean air and water and examples of diseases. The relationship between these broader problems and species loss could be explained more clearly, and the examples need fuller development. Your position—supporting the view that other environmental problems are more important—is stated, but the reason that they are a “general necessity” is not sufficiently explained. The response is 231 words, below the required 250; this limits the space available to develop both views.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a concluding summary. These divisions help the reader identify the two sides. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes unclear. For example, “For example, vehicle and deforestation” does not clearly illustrate the preceding point, and the second body paragraph repeats that air and water are important without developing the argument further. Linking words such as “Because” and “Thus” are used mechanically, and some sentence connections are incomplete. To improve, organise each body paragraph around one clear claim, explain it, and then give a specific example that directly supports it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “fossil fuel,” “pollutions,” “deforestation,” “species,” and “environmental problem,” which makes the subject clear. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, word-form, and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to follow, such as “perticular,” “envirmental,” “deases,” and “usefull.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “human cuttings the forest” and “construct the city.” Aim to learn accurate topic collocations and use them consistently; for instance, “cut down forests” and “build cities” are more natural. More precise vocabulary for environmental impacts would also help you distinguish biodiversity loss from pollution and water contamination.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “Because” and “if,” but control is inconsistent. Agreement errors occur in “environmental problem are,” “others belives,” and “Air and water is.” Verb forms are also faulty in “human cuttings the forest” and “we can living our healthy life.” Several sentences begin with “Because” but are left as fragments, while punctuation and capitalisation are often inaccurate, as in “Because, in this era” and “plants.Moreover.” These frequent errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete sentence patterns, then check verb forms and sentence boundaries during proofreading.

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