Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The above diagram shows that how electricity is generated in a hydroelectricity power station and then produced. This is the chart of hydroelectric power station. firstly, electricity is very important in our daily life. In many rurals area it is still not available. It is produced when water from river goes to Damn with high level of reservoir in the day time because in night it it closed . Water intake is open only the day time. After that the flow of water generate the electricity and goes to the generator in the power station from the power lines to the national grid. Then, transfers to the tower and then transformer after that it comes to us homes. And at night, flow of water during pumping from low level reservoir to high level reservoir. this is the whole process of making the electricity nowadays. electricity is such a blessing nowadays.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of objectively describing the process, the student includes irrelevant personal opinions such as 'electricity is very important in our daily life' and 'electricity is such a blessing'. The description of the process is fragmented and lacks a clear overview of the stages involved. Key technical components are mentioned, but the explanation of the cycle (the movement of water between reservoirs) is confusing and inaccurate. To improve, you must focus solely on the data or diagram provided, avoid personal commentary, and ensure the sequence of events is described logically and accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The text lacks logical organization. It is written as a single paragraph without a clear introduction, body, or conclusion. While some basic cohesive devices like 'firstly', 'after that', and 'then' are used, they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly, making the progression of ideas difficult to follow. The lack of paragraphing and the inclusion of irrelevant, non-academic sentences disrupt the flow of the report. To improve, you should structure your response into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main features, and detailed paragraphs describing the process steps in chronological order.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'rurals area' instead of 'rural areas' and 'Damn' instead of 'dam'. The phrasing is often simplistic, and the student relies on basic vocabulary to describe a technical process. There is no attempt to use precise, topic-specific terminology (e.g., 'turbine', 'penstock', 'generator', 'reversibility'). To improve, focus on learning technical vocabulary related to diagrams and processes, and work on using more precise nouns and verbs to describe the movement and transformation of energy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('flow of water generate'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures ('The above diagram shows that how electricity is generated'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and misused commas. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, you should practice using complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, which are essential for describing processes, and focus on correcting basic errors in verb tense and article usage.

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