Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is a famous line in urdu which means " Music is the apetite for the soul" and it pretty much conveys how much music is grown deeply in the society. Music is a universal way of expressing happiness whether you are from anywhere on the globe, All the different cultures has thier specific musics and compositions.

It is very True that music brings people together and it is one of the best ways to do that because music is never boring and people tends to get to know others by kind of music they like. Age factor is a sort of hindrance our generation or maybe every genertion has to figure out for understanding and getting close to parents/ grand parents/ children and other people, but music acts like a binding factor for society in every occassion. Also people from different cultures have thier beautiful music and songs and when celebrating their culture in a multiethnic society everyone joins it and loves how each cultutre is beautifully different in thier own way.

In this era where we have the whole world in our hands and we can connect with anyone from the globe , we can explore different cultures. The music has grown immensively and people from all the different cultures, countries and languages are now digital audience and supporters and the music has brought them closer then ever before and it is now a source of spreading positivity towards everyone.

Generational gap is a loop in which every generation was and is stuck in it and there are so many things different in each generation whether it is their way of thinking , thier goals or the life style, and specially in this technological era where everything is digital the older generation is the one who saw it coming and changing the world but music is a key which opens doors of happiness for everyone equally.

In my opinion of bringing peple ogether the music is a very important part , thorugh music anyone can demonstrate thier culture , language and it allows everyone to appreciate and participate as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that music can connect people across cultures and generations. You address both aspects of the question, referring to shared enjoyment, cultural celebrations, and digital access to music. These are relevant ideas, and the example of people joining celebrations in a multiethnic society helps illustrate your point. However, some claims remain broad rather than being fully explained. For instance, you say people get to know others through their musical preferences, but do not show how this leads to meaningful connection. The discussion of generational differences is also repeated, while a specific example—such as family members sharing a song or attending a concert—could develop it more convincingly. Clarifying how music brings people together, rather than simply stating that it does, would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an overall structure, moving from an introduction to supporting points and a concluding opinion. Paragraphs generally group related ideas, and linking expressions such as “Also” and “In this era” help signal additions. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined in long sentences, and the discussion of the generation gap appears in more than one place without a clear new development. Some references are also vague, such as “it” in “it is one of the best ways to do that,” where the reader must infer the meaning. Organise the body into distinct points—one about cultural connection and one about age—and use clearer sentence boundaries and references to make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary, including “universal,” “multiethnic society,” “generational gap,” and “digital audience,” which helps you discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. There are also attempts at expressive phrasing, such as music being a “binding factor.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural combinations are noticeable, including “apetite,” “thier,” “immensively,” and “source of spreading positivity.” Some wording is also repetitive, particularly “different cultures” and “brings people together.” Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, and vary repeated expressions. For example, “music has grown immensely” is more idiomatic than “grown immensively,” while “a source of positivity” is more natural than “a source of spreading positivity.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “whether” and “where,” and your main meaning is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. For example, “All the different cultures has” should use a plural verb, and “people tends” should also be plural. The opening sentence contains a run-on structure, while “In my opinion of bringing people together” does not form a clear grammatical phrase. Punctuation around long sentences is also inconsistent. To improve, check agreement in each clause, use articles where needed, and divide sentences that contain several separate claims. These changes would make your varied sentence structures more controlled and precise.

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