Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people believe that music is good way to bring people of other cultures and ages together. In my opinion people of almost any ages likes to hear music but different cultures of music might bore a person especially if its in different language.

In my opinion, singing entertains, which any age group can enjoy. And recent research says it has great effect on our mind when we hear songs that relates our life it affects our brain and help in revive past memories and it also helps in releasing dopamine which is a happiness harmones released by our brain nd results in making one feel relaxed and happy.

On the other hand, music could be entertaining as long as you understand the meaning.If you do not unerstand what the singer is talking about ,it could results in turning your mood off. From my persective in order to bring different people from many cultures close together is by exploring diferent places domstically and internationally and by attending their weddings and funerals, one can learn and experience many things about their cultures.

Although tone of the music can get different ages people close but in my point of view there are other ways to get cultures together like sharing to the world on internet about the famous things about your culture, and your way of life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a relevant but only partly developed response to the question. Your position is that music can connect people through shared enjoyment, while language and cultural differences may limit this effect. The point that songs can revive memories and create happiness is relevant, but the explanation focuses on individual reactions rather than showing how music brings different ages or cultures together. Your discussion of travel, weddings, funerals, and the internet shifts towards other ways of learning about cultures, so it does not fully answer the question about music. The response is also 25 words below the required minimum. Develop a clear extent of agreement and support it with a specific example of people from different backgrounds sharing music.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “Although” signal contrast. However, the overall progression is not always clear: the second paragraph discusses music’s effects on the mind, while the next moves from understanding lyrics to travel and cultural events. These ideas need clearer links to the central question. Some transitions are also awkward or incomplete, such as beginning a sentence with “And recent research says,” and the final paragraph introduces internet sharing without explaining how it relates to music. Organise the essay around a clear position, with each paragraph developing one reason and a relevant example; use linking phrases to show relationships rather than simply announce a new point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “different cultures,” “past memories,” “releasing dopamine,” and “entertaining,” which helps communicate your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts less clear, such as “happiness harmones,” “turning your mood off,” and “sharing to the world.” There are also repeated general terms such as “people,” “music,” and “culture,” where more precise language could strengthen the discussion. Aim to use accurate phrases for shared musical experiences and cultural exchange, and check spelling carefully. For example, “music from another culture” is clearer than “different cultures of music,” and “dampen your mood” is more natural than “turning your mood off.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast beginning “Although tone of the music can get different ages people close.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “people of almost any ages likes,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “songs that relates our life,” which also has agreement and number problems. Articles and sentence boundaries are inconsistent, as in “music is good way” and “meaning.If.” The long sentence about research and dopamine contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, and divide long sentences into shorter units before attempting more complex structures.

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