Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often view that music is a good way of bringing people of other cultures and ages together. i completly agree with this view. Because music give a rest for work also reduse stress level and music connect. further more totally people globally enjoy all ages people together in this type of singing program.

The main reason why i agree is that producers can generate enormous level of concerts and invites all over the world individual many people purchase concerts tickets through online and plan the tour also apply leave letter in the office pack the important things booking flight and going to the other country with family members and friend. For example; in the london producers can plan a big cocert and famous singers invite in the place and singing songs.Everyone enjoy and reduce stress. inaddition feeling greate also enjoy with family.

Another important factor to consider is reason every age people enjoy this type of singing concert. music is a good way of brinning people of different ages and culture. The government should spend more money this type of cultural festival it helps people know own country culture also this type of singing program can enjoy all age people and every one enjoy cultural festival. While, singer give a best performance and every one enjoy with family members. For instance; in the lahore jillani park maneger can design a big and fantastic festival and send a invitation to famous celeberities for perform a song and other activites. whereas, in the lahore all people come in the concert and enjoy a performance and all age people enjoy the cultural event inaddition songs.

In conclusion, concert can give a happiness all people and enjoy moments reduce stress whereas this types of singing concerts give hapiness all age group of people like old, young all people. i strongly believe that this type of concerts built knowledge for culture and help enjoy all ages people also create a love all over the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear from the opening: “i completly agree,” and you give relevant reasons, including shared enjoyment, reduced stress, and cultural festivals. The concert examples in London and Lahore also connect to music bringing people together. However, the response only partly develops the task: it does not explain in much detail how music itself bridges cultural differences, and several points focus on organising concerts, buying tickets, or taking leave rather than on the effect of music. The claim that festivals build cultural knowledge is relevant but needs a specific explanation or example. To strengthen the response, develop two or three central reasons and show clearly how each supports your view. The length requirement is met; 10 words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. You also use signposts such as “The main reason,” “Another important factor,” and “In conclusion.” However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from producers arranging concerts to ticket purchases, travel plans, and stress relief without clearly linking each point. Connectors such as “further more,” “whereas,” and “inaddition” are sometimes awkward or do not show the relationship between ideas accurately. Repeated references to everyone enjoying concerts also limit development. Organise each paragraph around one main point, then explain and illustrate it in a clear sequence, using fewer but more precise linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “concerts,” “cultural festival,” “famous singers,” and “reduce stress,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “enjoy,” “all age people,” and “singing program.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “brinning,” “hapiness,” “celebrities,” and “producers can generate enormous level of concerts,” which make some meanings less clear or sound unnatural. Aim to use accurate collocations and a wider range of terms for shared experiences and cultural exchange. For example, describe audiences as “people of different generations” and explain how a performance “creates a shared experience.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, grammatical errors are frequent, and attempts to join several ideas often produce faulty sentences. For example, “Because music give a rest for work also reduse stress level and music connect” is not a complete, well-formed sentence; “music give” also lacks subject–verb agreement. Other examples include “every age people enjoy” and “concert can give a happiness,” where agreement and article use are inaccurate. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly at sentence beginnings and around examples. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “which,” or “so that.” Check verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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