Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is true that most of the people belive that music is one of the best way to bring people of different culture and age togather, I am agree up to some extent to the above statment.

In the Past about all people were sitting outside the homes or in the guest room and were lisning the radio for music and news (having people of all ages and society), so this is one of the example from which we concluded that music is one of the best way to make people of different culture and age togather.

With the passage of time people started buying TV for their homes,the whole members of the family having different ages sit together in front of the TV to watch and lisn music, Dramas and News, so it is conformed that TV brough togather all members of the family of diffent ages.

When Mobile phones lunched,everyone start buying there own mobile , now everyone have there own phone and they watch and lisn music through it , no need of social bonding just sit in the corner of the room and watch and lisn music from their own phone.

One of the reason is that those socities who are rich in music and other cultural activity they are devolping day by day, on the other hand if they forget it or lost it so they are unable to become developed.

In the last due to above mentioned reasons I completely agree with the opinion that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages togather

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a position—“I am agree up to some extent”—and later conclude that you “completely agree,” so the extent of your agreement is inconsistent. The examples about families listening to radios and watching television are relevant to how shared media can bring different ages together, but they do not clearly show how music connects people from different cultures. The mobile-phone example instead suggests that people now listen alone, which complicates your argument but is not explained or balanced against the benefits. The claim that music-rich societies develop is also asserted without support. To strengthen the response, maintain one clear position and explain specific examples showing music connecting both age groups and cultures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable sequence, moving from radio to television and then mobile phones, followed by a broader claim and a conclusion. However, the ideas do not build a clear overall argument: the first examples concern shared family media, while the phone example describes people becoming isolated, and the relationship between these points is not made explicit. Linking phrases such as “With the passage of time” and “On the other hand” provide some signposting, but connections are often mechanical or unclear. The opening and conclusion also repeat the same general claim without resolving the shift from partial to complete agreement. Use separate paragraphs for distinct reasons, and add clear explanations showing how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small range of topic-related vocabulary, including “music,” “different cultures,” “social bonding,” and “cultural activity,” which makes the general subject clear. However, key words and phrases are repeated frequently, especially “bring people together,” “different ages,” and “listen music,” so the expression lacks flexibility. Several spelling and word-choice errors—such as “belive,” “togather,” “conformed,” and “socities”—make the writing less clear and reduce precision. Some combinations are also unnatural, including “rich in music” and “buying TV.” Build a more accurate range of collocations for discussing shared musical experiences, cultural exchange, and social connection, and proofread spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response relies mainly on simple statements and repeated sentence patterns, with limited control of more complex structures. Attempts to combine ideas often produce frequent errors that can make the reader pause. For example, “I am agree” has an incorrect verb form, while “everyone have there own phone” has a subject–verb agreement error and an incorrect possessive form. The opening sentence also joins several clauses with commas, and the long sentence about family members watching television is difficult to follow. Tense and article use are inconsistent in examples such as “people started buying TV” and “everyone start buying.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries before adding more complex clauses.

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