Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

One day after coming back home from school i was sitting on my couch with my grandmother. She was there also sitting and listen music on her radio. While listening all that music she felt so calm and relaxed watching her i also started to listen that music and tried to get that the music was about. After hearing that music for a while i got to know that the music was from her era when she used to be young lady. When i understood the deep meaning of that song conversely i loved that too.Now me and my grandmother we both listen that music together she also tells me that this song is a local folk song of her culture.

Firstly after getting the experience of finding a new music and get connected to it makes me to agree that yes music is a good way to connecting people of different culture and ages together.

These days almost everybody has now started to listen new music from different parts of world and from different cultures too. Nowadays individuals connects with the new music whether they understand or not. They listen and enjoy that too. Through this exchange of music people got to know more about the world, traditions, culture, people and livelihood.

Today music industry of every country is very hyped part there is intense huge craze of artists and and fan or cults. There are many artists these days who had become inspiration for younger generation. And they also ear money, respect, fame and luxury along with a happy life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear in the second paragraph: you agree that music can connect people across cultures and generations. The story about listening to your grandmother’s folk song is relevant and gives a personal example of an age and cultural connection. You also mention how music introduces listeners to traditions and people from other parts of the world. However, the response addresses the question only partially because the later discussion of artists’ fame, money and luxury does not explain how music brings people together. Several claims, such as “almost everybody” listening to music from other cultures, are asserted rather than supported. Develop two or three relevant reasons with specific examples, and explain more fully how shared listening creates connection.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has some organisation: it begins with a personal anecdote, states agreement, and then gives broader points about cultural exchange and the music industry. Basic linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “These days” and “Through this exchange” help signal movement between ideas. However, the overall progression is not fully clear. The final paragraph shifts from cultural connection to artists’ success without showing how that point supports the argument, and the anecdote is lengthy before the main position is stated. Some references, including “that” in “They listen and enjoy that too,” are unclear. Use a focused paragraph for each reason, connect each example explicitly to your position, and make references more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “local folk song,” “different cultures,” “traditions,” “inspiration” and “younger generation.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and the personal example gives you opportunities to describe music and cultural identity. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “finding a new music,” “intense huge craze,” “fan or cults” and “ear money.” Repetition of “music,” “these days” and “culture” also limits flexibility. Aim for more precise collocations and vocabulary that directly expresses connection, such as shared interests, cultural exchange or a sense of belonging. Check word forms and spelling when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the opening anecdote shows an effort to describe events in sequence. However, grammatical errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to follow. For example, “She was there also sitting and listen music” has problems with word order, verb form and the article before “music”; “individuals connects” has subject–verb disagreement; and “makes me to agree” uses an incorrect verb pattern. Tense shifts also occur in the anecdote, while sentence boundaries and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “that too.Now.” Practise accurate past-tense narration and subject–verb agreement, and build longer sentences from correctly formed clauses before adding complexity.

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