Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Music is an effective way to bring people together of different ages and cultures because it is an important part of life. I completely agree with this statment because music has no boundries and every person of different ages and culture enjoyed it.

To begin with, music create a bond between the people in modern era every single person listen music and enjoyed with their family and friends, Music create a bond in people no matter they are old and young. In family geatherings music is an important part. In geatherings music play at normal sound that every person talk each other easily. Music create friendship between the different people for example a music concert is held at sahiwal and every person is allowed to come im sure people go to the concert enjoyed the music and makes new friends. Listening music do not requried the ages and culture. some of people have great interest in english songs and some hindi songs.

Moreover, through music people can easily learn about the other traditionals and they got a great knowledge about the other cultures. In Pakistan about five to six major culture all of these culture have different music. Through music people are also attend the international music concerts and know about the foreign cultures and their living standards. Music also help to understand the other cultures languages and many people speak easily other culture lagnuages because they liked their songs.

In conclusion, Music is an essential part of life and music do not have any kind of boundires, every people with different age and culture listen each others music and build a strong bond between the other culture people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening: “I completely agree,” and the response addresses both age groups and cultural differences. You give relevant reasons, including music at family gatherings, concerts bringing people into contact, and songs helping listeners learn about other cultures and languages. These examples support your view, but some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For instance, the Sahiwal concert example says people “make new friends” without showing how music helps this happen, while the claim that listeners learn languages could use a specific illustration. Develop each main reason with a clearer explanation or concrete example, and avoid broad claims such as “every person” enjoying music.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning “To begin with” and “Moreover,” and a conclusion that restates your position. The ideas generally progress from music connecting people socially to its role in cultural understanding. However, connections within sentences and between examples are sometimes mechanical or unclear. The first body paragraph repeats “Music create a bond” several times, and the shift from family gatherings to the concert example could be smoother. Some references, such as “all of these culture,” are also unclear. Use a wider range of linking expressions selectively, reduce repetition, and make the relationship between each example and its main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “family gatherings,” “music concert,” “traditions,” “cultures,” and “international music concerts,” so the reader can follow the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “music,” “people,” and “culture.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “boundries,” “geatherings,” “traditionals,” and “lagnuages,” as well as unnatural expressions like “at normal sound” and “learn about the other traditionals.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build a more precise vocabulary for social connection and cultural exchange, and check spelling and common word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the overall meaning is usually understandable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur across the response. For example, “music create a bond” needs subject–verb agreement, while “every person … enjoyed it” does not maintain the appropriate tense. In “Listening music do not requried the ages and culture,” the sentence structure and verb pattern are difficult to follow. Several sentences also join independent ideas with commas, as in the opening of the first body paragraph. Practise accurate present-simple forms and build longer sentences with clear clauses, using full stops or conjunctions to control punctuation.

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