Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often claimed that music is an effective means of uniting people of varing cultures and age ranges together. I agree with this view, because it give rise to shared interests, and can teach other people about your culture.

People from different countries are fans of the same artists. This give people something in common. Despite their differences of nationality, religion, culture and language they will have something they all love and will bond over this. For example, K-pop has a huge fan base. People from around the world love to listen to them. Their fans develop a sense of being oneness and togetherness which makes them to give respect to others and try to learn about them.

When you meet someone new, you can teach them about your culture. Each country has a unique musical heritage. It is very interesting to learn about different types of music and this brings people together. For example, Ireland has a unique style of music, instruments and language. People listening to its music gets familiar with the language, their way of presenting music and also the range of instruments they use. In this way music gives an opportunity to present your culture and make people know about your language.

In conclusion, I agree with the statement. Because music is a way to bring people together and being loved. They make an effort to know about others their culture and language. This give them something in common. Also, it teach people about unique musical intruments.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear from the introduction to the conclusion: you agree that music can unite people, and you give two relevant reasons—shared interest in artists and learning about other cultures. The K-pop and Irish music examples help illustrate these points. However, the ideas are only partly developed. For instance, the K-pop paragraph says fans “develop a sense of being oneness and togetherness,” but does not explain in detail how this leads to meaningful connections across age groups. The response also focuses more on culture than on the task’s reference to different ages. Develop that aspect with a specific example, and explain the effects of each example more fully, to make the response more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present separate reasons, and a conclusion restates your position. Topic sentences such as “People from different countries are fans of the same artists” and “When you meet someone new, you can teach them about your culture” make the paragraph purposes clear. However, some links are mechanical or unclear. The conclusion repeats earlier points rather than drawing them together, and “They make an effort to know about others their culture and language” has unclear referencing and an awkward connection between ideas. Use clearer pronouns and transitions, and make the conclusion synthesise how both shared enjoyment and cultural learning support your view.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “shared interests,” “fan base,” “musical heritage,” and “instruments,” and these choices generally communicate your ideas. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “a sense of being oneness and togetherness,” though this phrasing is inaccurate and affects clarity. Other noticeable word-choice or spelling problems include “varing,” “intruments,” and “being loved.” Some expressions are repetitive, particularly “bring people together” and “something in common.” Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe music as “a shared source of enjoyment” and say that fans “feel a sense of unity.” This would make the vocabulary more accurate and varied.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some attempts at more complex structures, including “Despite their differences of nationality, religion, culture and language…” and “When you meet someone new…”. Meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “This give people something in common” and “People listening to its music gets familiar,” as well as the incorrect construction “makes them to give respect.” The final paragraph also contains a sentence fragment beginning “Because music is a way…”. Review agreement, verb patterns, and sentence boundaries, and combine ideas into complete sentences. More accurate control of these structures would make your argument easier to follow.

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