Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Man is a social animal. He knows how to adopt himself in a very new or particular situations. Music remains a significant part of people's life everywhere. Nowadays, music is ubiquotous. I strongly beleive that music is a best way connect people of different traditions and era both mutally and emotionally.

Here, I would give some reasons to defend my opinion. Music holds harmony. Listening to them offers tranquility and and a calm environment. People has different tastes in music as these are in numeruous languages and they want to listen them in their own language. let me give an example. For instance, Pushtoon wants to use Pashto songs in their events events and dances a lot.

However, punjabis and their never ending obession with Siraiki and Punjabi songs are noticeable. Furthermore, music of different ages are aslo different but people love to listen 90s more than others. Because the melody that 90s songs holds no one carries which develops a fantastic connection of love between the people.

In addition to it, mostly in our weddings we feel delight to play every kind of song, of every language. No matter whether we are having any understanding or not and this creates a sense of fun which doubles the delight of our weddings. I want to state one of my little and amazing life experience. Last year, I had my brother's wedding and we invited all our relatives and friends. Out of them some are related to other cultures and traditions.

However that event was our memorable occasion because there we found a chance to strengthen our bond with love, laughter and delight and merely just due to the gatherings of Qawwali Night because we had a huge fun at different kinds of songs with zero understanding.

In conclusion, i would say that it is not wrong to say that music helps us to make our more stronger and friendly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you strongly agree that music can connect people across cultures and generations. You support this with relevant examples, including different language traditions, older songs, and the Qawwali night at your brother’s wedding. This addresses the question and gives the response a personal, relevant basis. However, some points are asserted more than explained: for example, the claim that 1990s melodies create “a fantastic connection of love” could be linked more explicitly to how people of different ages share them. The cultural examples also focus mainly on particular communities rather than showing more broadly how music bridges differences. Develop each example with a clearer explanation of its effect.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an overall structure: an introduction, supporting paragraphs, a personal example, and a conclusion. The wedding anecdote gives the discussion a recognisable progression from general claims to personal experience. However, the organisation within paragraphs is sometimes loose, and connections between ideas are not always clear. “However” introduces the Punjabi example even though it does not contrast with the preceding point, and the repeated use of “However” and “In addition to it” makes linking feel mechanical. The wedding account is split across paragraphs, interrupting the story, while “there” and “that event” have somewhat unclear references. Group related examples together and use more precise transitions and referencing to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of relevant vocabulary, including “tranquility,” “traditions,” “melody,” and “strengthen our bond,” and these choices help communicate your ideas about music and connection. There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “ubiquotous,” “beleive,” “numeruous,” and “obession.” Some phrases are unnatural or imprecise: “music holds harmony,” “people has different tastes,” and “the gatherings of Qawwali Night” do not express the intended meaning naturally. Repetition of “delight,” “fun,” and “different” also limits variety. Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully; more precise phrases such as “music creates a sense of harmony” would make your meaning clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “because” and “whether,” and the main ideas are generally understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, sentence construction, and punctuation are frequent enough to affect fluency. For example, “People has different tastes” should use a plural verb, while “music is a best way connect people” is missing grammatical elements. The sentence beginning “Because the melody…” is a fragment, and “which doubles the delight of our weddings” has an unclear grammatical reference. There are also run-on or awkwardly joined sentences, particularly in the wedding anecdote. Practise building complete sentences, checking subject–verb agreement, and using punctuation to separate independent ideas.

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