Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays many people believe that music connects people from different cultures and ages together. I believe that it is true that music is one good way to bond people from different cultures and ages with each other as it brings joy and elimate the need of known language.

In my view, music is something everybody enjoys despite someones age or culture. A good music brings joy as music creates its own joyful environment that relives people wheather from different ages or culture from stress. Even science proves that music brings a sense of happiness wheather it is children or adult or if from different culture.

Secondly, many people believes music is one magical way of communication that removes the need of a verbal language. For example, tourist of different ages, while visiting different country can be seen enjoying local music despite understanding the local languge. This certaintly prove to an extent that music doesn't have any boundry limited to age or cultures.

In conculsion, music is universal language which dosent need

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear: you agree that music can connect people across cultures and ages, and you give two relevant reasons—shared enjoyment and communication without a common spoken language. The examples about music relieving stress and tourists enjoying local music support the topic, but they remain general and are not developed with a specific situation or explanation. The conclusion is cut off at “music is universal language which dosent need,” so the response does not provide a complete final statement. The task is also only partially addressed because the response contains 171 words, below the required 250, leaving limited space to explain and support your ideas. Develop each reason with a concrete example and finish with a complete conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “In my view” and “Secondly,” and an attempted conclusion. This makes the main line of argument fairly easy to follow. However, progression is limited because each body paragraph makes a broad claim and then moves quickly to another general statement, rather than building a point through explanation and evidence. Some linking is repetitive, particularly the repeated references to “different cultures and ages” and the repeated use of “music.” The final paragraph is incomplete, which weakens the overall sense of closure. To improve, organise each body paragraph around one clear claim, explain its effect, and then give a specific example; use referencing and linking phrases to connect those steps without repeating the same wording.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “bond,” “verbal language,” “local music,” and “universal language,” so your meaning is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make the writing less precise: “elimate the need of known language,” “a good music,” “relives people,” and “doesn't have any boundry.” Some key terms, such as “joy” and “music,” are repeated rather than replaced with suitable alternatives. Aim to learn accurate word partnerships and check spelling carefully. For example, “remove the need for a shared language” is more natural than “elimate the need of known language,” while “cross-cultural appeal” could help express the central idea more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a reason clause with “as” and a concession-like phrase beginning “despite.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. Examples include “many people believes,” where the subject and verb do not agree, “A good music brings,” where the article and noun construction are faulty, and “tourist … can be seen enjoying,” where the singular/plural pattern is inconsistent. The sentence beginning “Even science proves” also has an unclear structure, and the conclusion is unfinished. Practise checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, then build longer sentences from accurate clauses. Clear, controlled sentences will make your ideas easier to follow.

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