Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Music is really an intresting thing for human being. People listen to the music on different occasions including parties, gathering or festivals. Music is a common thing to represent different cultures in the world.

All the cultures have their own style of music which they listen on daily basis and represent their culture on special events. There is also common type of music which not exactly use for represent the cultures or religion. We listen songs on daily basis to enjoy the special moments or express our feelings. Music is a good way of bringing different kinds of people together coming from any cultures. Different kind of people comes together when a music they listen and like the most. They got same taste in music with different ages and it close them to eachother.

There are also some points where music play negetive role in the people's life. Some type of music used to express hate or rudeness. It gives a great impact on young generations and make them do some bad things in societies. Now a days raps songs are coming with bad words and encouring young people to fight and misbehave to others.

I do have seen a real example in my life where a boy paid with his life because of music. He used to listen some indian songs got access to weapons like he saw in the music video. He accidently killed himslef with those guns. I will prefer to listen only good music with no bad wordings and promoting weapons as cool things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the topic by explaining that music can connect people with shared tastes across cultures and ages, and you give a personal example to support your discussion. However, the response does not establish a clear, sustained answer to “to what extent” you agree. The opening says music brings people together, but much of the later discussion focuses on harmful lyrics and weapons, without explaining how this changes your overall view of music’s unifying role. The example is relevant to the risks of some music, but its connection to the question is not fully developed. State your degree of agreement clearly, then develop reasons and examples that directly support that position; keep the negative point proportionate to the main argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: it introduces music, discusses its ability to unite people, and then presents a concern and personal example. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is limited because the first two paragraphs repeat similar points about music and shared tastes, while the shift to harmful music is abrupt. Linking phrases such as “There are also some points” and “Now a days” do not clearly show how the new point relates to your main position. The final recommendation about listening to “good music” also arrives without a developed conclusion. Organise the body around distinct reasons, use clearer links between them, and finish by restating your overall view.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate basic ideas, including “cultures,” “festivals,” “shared taste,” and “young generations.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts less clear, such as “intresting,” “negetive,” “encouring,” and “bad wordings.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “a common thing to represent different cultures” and “they got same taste” do not express the ideas fluently. Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe music as a “shared cultural expression” and say that it “brings listeners closer” rather than relying on repeated forms of “common” and “different.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, for example, “There are also some points where music play negetive role…” and “Different kind of people comes together when a music they listen and like the most.” However, the longer constructions are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, tense, and sentence formation occur frequently enough to make some passages difficult to follow. Examples include “All the cultures have their own style … which they listen,” “music play,” and “I do have seen.” Several sentences also lack a clear grammatical connection between clauses. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and use a smaller number of well-controlled complex sentences, such as clauses beginning with “because” or “although,” before adding more variety.

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