Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that songs are the best way to bring individuals of seperate traditions togather. I do agree with this statement, music gather the different regions with different cultural and traditional values. It also able to connect people with different age groups.

Overall, Music plays very important role in our society but it also depends on the values. For example, in my country there is a studio named as "Coke studio". They produce the songs and their music is world wide famous. Such as, Pakistan and India both have different cultural values moreover, religiously both are opposite but when it comes to the music-taste they have same things.

Besides that, music plays crucial role but its not the best way to gather all cultures and the people from different ages. For instance, this is modern age, and people from the younger generation have totally different taste in the music like, they listen to the Popstar and BTS but the older generation is more into old school-music. Like, Kishore kumar and Madam Noor jahan. Furthermore, my younger sister listen to Korean-music which is not unable to understand for me because I don't even understand what the lyrics are but she sings that songs.

To conclude that, music plays essential role in bringing the culture togather from my perspective, its not for to sum-up the generations. Generational gap can't be unseen additionally, ages are unable to be gather with the music only because of the different opinions and music-taste.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that music can connect cultures, while qualifying that it cannot necessarily bridge generations. The examples of Coke Studio and your sister’s interest in Korean music are relevant and help make the response personal. However, the position is not fully consistent: the opening says music is “the best way” to bring people together, whereas later you say it is “not the best way” and cannot unite generations. The cultural point is also asserted more than explained, and the age-group discussion mainly shows different tastes rather than whether music can still bring people together despite them. The response is one word below the required minimum. Develop each side of your qualified opinion and make the extent of your agreement explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, supporting paragraphs and a conclusion, and the examples generally appear in relevant places. Connectors such as “For example,” “Besides that” and “Furthermore” signal relationships between ideas. However, progression is uneven: the second paragraph begins with a broad statement about music’s role, then shifts to the Coke Studio example, while the next paragraph changes direction without clearly explaining how its counterpoint relates to your overall agreement. Some linking phrases are awkward or do not express the intended relationship, and the conclusion repeats earlier claims rather than drawing them together. Improve the logical sequence by giving each paragraph one clear purpose, then use precise transitions to show how the examples support your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “cultural values,” “younger generation,” “generational gap” and “music-taste,” and the examples make your meaning mostly understandable. There is also an attempt to use less common expressions such as “crucial role” and “essential role.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, including “gather all cultures,” “not unable to understand” and “sum-up the generations.” Spelling errors such as “seperate,” “togather” and “world wide” are noticeable, and repeated use of “music” and “different” limits variety. Build precision by learning natural collocations for connecting people and describing musical preferences, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “but” and a reason introduced by “because.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure. However, errors are frequent and sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “music gather” and “my younger sister listen,” where subject–verb agreement is incorrect, and “It also able to connect,” which is missing an auxiliary verb. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention: “plays very important role” lacks an article, while “To conclude that, music plays…” joins ideas awkwardly. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete verb phrases and article use, then proofread punctuation and sentence construction so complex attempts remain clear.

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