Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is often said that music has no boundaries of age and culture. This statement is factually correct with just a minor issue.

When a musician makes a song, the audience is not just tied up to a specific culture or a region. For example, the king of pop music, Micheal Jackson was known to everone around the globe. His albums were listened by people of all ages and to this date the he is still loved by the people worldwide. Similiarly, the great classical singer of Pakistan, Nusrat Faateh Ali Khan had a huge fan following in America. People of different ages attended his concerts in the New york back in late 90s.

Music is a form an art and it is used to convey the feelings from one person to the whole audience. Art has no boundaries. Some people like to hear romantic songs, some like the folk songs and some opt for the rock music. I also have a list of romantic songs both in my native language Urdu as well as English. I usually jump from one song to another without care and have a quality time.

The only issue is that there needs to be a check and balance by the producers to keep the music on the ethical side to avoid any damage on the society. Especially the young audience.

In conclusion, the music the is way of connecting people of different ages and cultures. But there is also a need for the check by the authorities over the type of content that is being produced by the artists.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you agree that music connects people across cultures and ages, and the examples of Michael Jackson and Nusrat Fateh Ali Khan are relevant support. The personal example about enjoying songs in Urdu and English also helps address the topic. This is a solid response, but the discussion is unevenly developed. The opening calls the statement correct “with just a minor issue,” yet the concern about ethical content is introduced only briefly and is not clearly linked to whether music brings people together. Explain more fully how music creates shared experiences, and clarify whether your concern qualifies your agreement or is a separate point. More development and a consistently focused position would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, supporting paragraphs, a qualification, and a conclusion. The examples generally follow the main idea, and phrases such as “For example,” “Similarly,” and “In conclusion” help signal progression. However, the connection between the main argument and the paragraph about producers controlling ethical content is not fully established; “Especially the young audience” is also left as a fragment rather than integrated into the preceding point. The conclusion repeats the central claim but does not resolve how this concern affects your overall position. Use clearer links between each paragraph’s purpose and the question, and develop the transition into your qualification so the progression feels less abrupt.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “audience,” “fan following,” “convey the feelings,” and “boundaries,” and the examples make your meaning clear. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “check and balance” and “ethical side,” though these are not natural or precise in context. Several spelling and word-choice errors—“everone,” “Similiarly,” “Micheal,” and “New york”—reduce accuracy, while phrases such as “jump from one song to another without care” sound awkward. Aim for more natural collocations and check spelling, especially in names and place names. Greater precision in describing music’s shared appeal would add flexibility and help move beyond generally understandable but sometimes imprecise vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the argument remains understandable. For example, “When a musician makes a song, the audience is not just tied up to a specific culture or a region” shows an attempt to use a subordinate clause. However, some grammatical errors affect accuracy: “Music is a form an art” is missing a necessary preposition, “the he is still loved” contains an unnecessary article, and “the music the is way” has an incorrect article and word order. “Especially the young audience” is a sentence fragment, and “people of different ages attended his concerts in the New York back in late 90s” has problems with article use. Review articles, sentence completeness, and clause construction while continuing to vary sentence patterns.

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