Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is often argued that song is a best way to bring people of different cultural communities and age group together. I agree with this view because of attractive tunes and rhythm and also bring sense of closeness regardless of different tradition.

Listening to music is one of the most common recreational activity that every people do. The music which consists of attractive tones and sounds is widely popular in every country. For instance, songs of taylor swift is widely famous in every country regardless of age or any traditional difference. The melodious and soothing voice of her attract every group of people. Age cannot define what kind of song we listen. Even people of non native english community listens to her music because of energetic tunes in her music and attractive visuals. Therefore, music gathers people of different culture together to feel the emotions behind the song.

Moreover, music brings people a sense of togetherness. Nowadays, there is high trend of listening to korean songs and people from all around the world listen to their music. Likewise, they have their different fanbse of them and hastag that are widely popular in social media. For example, the fanbase of bts is called army which is a community of that particular band where different communities of different country gather and cheer for their idols. This will bring them together and increase their bond stronger. In this way, nevertheless of different cultures and age music tendsto bring people close to each other.

In conclusion, music gathers people of different communities together because of attractive tunes and to give sense of togetherness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you agree that music can connect people across cultures and ages. Both body paragraphs give relevant reasons, supported by examples such as Taylor Swift’s international audience and BTS fans forming a community. This addresses the task, but the ideas are not developed equally fully. The first example focuses mainly on popularity and musical appeal, without showing in detail how listeners of different ages interact or connect. The BTS example explains community-building more directly, but claims such as fans becoming closer could use a specific explanation or personal example. To strengthen the response, develop each reason with a clearer cause-and-effect link to bringing people together and address both age and cultural differences more consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion that restates your position. The progression from music’s broad appeal to fan communities is logical, and linking expressions such as “For instance,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. This is already a coherent arrangement, though some connections feel mechanical or unclear. For example, “Therefore” introduces a conclusion that is not fully explained, while “In this way, nevertheless of different cultures and age” is difficult to follow. The conclusion also repeats the introduction rather than drawing together the two examples. Use clearer references and transitions, and make the relationship between each example and your main claim explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “recreational activity,” “melodious,” “soothing,” “togetherness,” and “community.” These choices show an attempt to go beyond very basic wording, and the main ideas remain understandable. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “song is a best way,” “different traditional difference,” and “increase their bond stronger” do not sound natural. There are also spelling and form errors, including “fanbse,” “hastag,” and “tendsto,” alongside repeated use of “attractive” and “different.” Build accuracy by learning common word partnerships and checking spelling and word forms. More precise terms for shared musical interests and cross-cultural connection would also help express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including relative clauses such as “The music which consists of attractive tones and sounds…” and a reason clause beginning “because of…”. Most sentences communicate the intended point, but some grammatical errors recur and occasionally make the relationships between ideas less clear. Examples include “every people do,” “songs of taylor swift is,” “voice of her attract,” and “people … listens,” where agreement or sentence structure needs attention. Articles and plurals also need more consistent control, as in “a best way” and “age group.” Practise checking the subject and verb in each clause, and revise sentences with several ideas so that each has a clear grammatical structure. This will make your varied attempts more accurate.

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