Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Music is one of the best artistic way that can bring people of different communities together were there would be diverse section of population coexists.

When there possible existing of various categories of people there could definitely be different kinds of opinions presents

music would be the impressive thing that bring varity of people with diverse opinions to a single platform.music can be the thing that can be loved by most of the people were with different cultures and traditions and ages of people that can bring together

In the modern day concerts were popular singers and artists perform there could be massive attendence of different communities irrespective of rage culture and traditions

Though there could be diverse section of population through the taste of music people can brought to the same stage

But to ther other side of the coin there could be people where even music cant bring them to centre of the stage .There variety of taste and opinions about the things where every or most of people cannot hold hand in hand together

For much of the society to come together most of the things need to take in count to satisfy most of the society in general and people in particular

As a cumulative thing music can be and at the same time can not be the thing that can bring various sections of people together

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the topic and give a partly balanced response: you say music can unite people, then acknowledge that differing tastes may prevent everyone from coming together. The concert example is relevant and helps illustrate your main point. However, your position remains unclear because the conclusion says music “can be and at the same time can not be” a unifying force without explaining the extent of your agreement. Several ideas are repeated or asserted rather than developed—for example, that music is loved by people of different cultures and ages. The response also does not meet the stated 250-word minimum, containing 231 words. To strengthen the answer, state your degree of agreement clearly and develop each reason with a specific example or explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from music’s unifying potential to a counterpoint about differing tastes, and the concert example gives the discussion a relevant focus. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because several paragraphs repeat similar claims rather than building a connected argument. The opening sentence is followed by an incomplete thought, “When there possible existing of various categories of people…,” and the next ideas are not clearly linked to it. Connectors such as “Though” and “But to the other side of the coin” signal contrast, but their use does not consistently clarify the relationship between points. Use a clear introduction, separate body paragraphs for your reasons, and a conclusion that directly answers the question. Referencing and punctuation also need to make the links between sentences easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “communities,” “cultures,” “traditions,” “concerts,” and “artists,” so the reader can identify the subject of your argument. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “irrespective of” and “a cumulative thing.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “diverse section of population,” “massive attendence,” and “brought to the same stage.” Spelling errors such as “varity” and “attendence” further reduce clarity. Aim for precise, natural collocations and avoid repeating broad phrases such as “different sections of people”; specific wording will help express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a contrast introduced by “Though” and a sentence beginning “For much of the society to come together.” However, the range is limited, and many sentences contain errors that make the relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “When there possible existing of various categories of people” lacks a complete grammatical structure, while “music would be the impressive thing that bring” has problems with verb form and agreement. The sentence about concerts also lacks a clear, complete structure. Capitalisation and sentence punctuation are inconsistent, with several ideas joined by full stops or left without clear boundaries. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles, and punctuation before adding more complex clauses.

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