Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

some people believe that music is a powerful way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. I completely agree with this opinion ,because music breaks the barriers of language age ,an creates felling of unity among people.

Music is understood every country, even if language is different. when people listen to song and dance together they started to understood each other culture. For example, when a Pakistani songs is heard in another country, people starts to learn Pakistani culture. Similarly, in concerts and festivals ,people from all countries gather together and become friend.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

Your position is clear: “I completely agree,” and you give relevant reasons, including music crossing language barriers and concerts bringing people together. The examples about Pakistani songs and international festivals also relate to the question. However, the response is only 85 words, so it is 165 words below the 250-word minimum; 10 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. As a result, the ideas are only briefly stated: the cultural example is not explained in detail, and the point about different age groups is not developed. To strengthen the response, explain how music connects generations as well as cultures, and support each reason with a fuller example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic, understandable progression: it states your opinion, then gives reasons and examples. “For example” and “Similarly” help signal the relationship between supporting points. However, the essay is very short and consists of only two paragraphs, so the ideas do not develop into a clear, sustained argument. The second paragraph moves quickly from language to cultural learning and then to concerts, without explaining how these points connect or building toward a conclusion. Develop one main idea per paragraph, use clear links between explanation and example, and add a concluding sentence that restates your view. This would make the organisation more complete and easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “barriers of language,” “unity,” “culture,” and “concerts and festivals.” These choices make your main meaning understandable. However, the range is limited, and several phrases are inaccurate or awkward, such as “Music is understood every country” and “a Pakistani songs.” There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “felling” and “friend,” which reduce precision. Aim to use a wider range of natural expressions for shared musical experiences and cultural exchange, and check spelling, singular/plural forms, and collocations. For example, “people from all countries gather together” could be expressed more precisely as people from different backgrounds gathering at a shared event.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You communicate your opinion using simple sentence patterns, and you attempt to connect ideas with a subordinate clause in “even if language is different.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent. Examples include “when people listen to song and dance together they started,” where the verb forms do not agree in tense, and “people starts,” where the subject and verb do not agree. The sentence beginning “Music is understood every country” also lacks a necessary preposition, while punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. Most sentences rely on basic structures, so there is little evidence of a wider range. Practise accurate present-tense sentences, articles, agreement, and punctuation, then add controlled complex sentences to explain your examples.

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