Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Introduction:- Now a days everyone is liking to listen music whether its not matter which types of song should be played. Many individuals said music is better way so people also listen the different types of songs in different languages according to upgrade their ages also. Mostly, people listened alot songs however grew up . In my opinion, People changes their taste to song however they grew up which is very common for all adults to change their habits according to the age which is very common but some are so rude while their ages are grow. They prefered silence in everywhere because they spent most of time in scripture peoples & don't liked to listen the music.

BP1:- First and foremost, there are clear reason, Why people like music because music is best way to divert our mind for other things & if we are borred to listen same kind of music languages then we have alot of different cultures of languages so we can listen and enjoy it. After, upbringing the age people prefer different kinds of enjoyment then they listen different cultures which gave us inner happiness.

For Example:- When we listen different kinds of cultures so they also taught us how in different areas people talked and which kind of music language they used or people liked to listen these music. So, in this ages they used to listen alot of music and sees which type of culture are used in our country.

BP2:- Additionally, when old age people listen the music in different cultures of language but some production houses used vulgar language and people also enjoy this which is very bad because which types of music they listen after used this kind of language in society whixh affect bad.

For example:- Basically adults choose to listen different cultures of music & after that they used this type of language in society and used speaker to listen this music in high volume.

Conclusion:- In conclusion, people listen music in all cultures In my Opinion, If we listen songs in all cultures whatever it is good or bad we can't use this type of language for any age of people because after listen they also learn and used in society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a general view that music is listened to across cultures and ages, and you include examples about learning how people in different areas speak and about music with vulgar language. However, the response does not clearly answer whether music brings people together: the introduction focuses on changing musical tastes as people age, while the conclusion shifts to whether listeners should copy offensive language. These points only partly address the question, and your position is difficult to identify consistently. The examples are relevant in places but are not explained enough to show how music connects people of different ages or cultures. State your degree of agreement directly, then develop two focused reasons with specific examples linked to that claim.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “First and foremost,” “Additionally” and “In conclusion” make the intended structure visible. However, the ideas do not progress clearly from one paragraph to the next. The first body paragraph moves from music as a distraction to changing tastes and then to learning about cultures, while the second focuses on vulgar lyrics and loud speakers rather than the central question of bringing people together. Some links are unclear, as in “After, upbringing the age,” and the examples do not consistently support the preceding point. Organise each paragraph around one reason, use clear references to connect sentences, and make the conclusion restate the same position established in the introduction.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “different cultures,” “languages,” “production houses,” “vulgar language” and “inner happiness,” so the reader can recognise the subject of music and society. However, the range is basic and several phrases are repeated, especially “different cultures” and “listen music.” Word choice and spelling errors sometimes make meaning difficult to follow, as in “scripture peoples,” “borred” and “which types of music they listen after used this kind of language.” Aim for more precise collocations and avoid repeating the same general terms. For example, describe music as a “shared cultural experience” or say that it “introduces listeners to musical traditions”; check spelling and choose words that express your intended meaning accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses with “because,” “when” and “if,” and the overall meaning can often be understood. However, complex sentences are frequently inaccurate, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction sometimes obscure the message. Examples include “people changes their taste,” “people listened alot songs,” and “some production houses used vulgar language.” The sentence beginning “If we listen songs in all cultures” also has an unclear structure and does not connect its ideas securely. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed subordinate clause, then check subject–verb agreement, tense consistency and punctuation. Greater control of these patterns would make your ideas easier to follow.

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