Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

It is an indisputable fact that music plays a crucial role in bringing a lot of people together. Some people argue that music is an effective method to bring people from different cultures and ages together. To some extend I agree with this statement, while I believe that there are some other ways to gather people such as national festivals and theatres.

On the one hand, music is considered one of the most effective ways to bring many people in one place for some reasons. One of the most obvious reasons people gather together to listen music is that live concert allows people to enjoy the moment of joy with friends and loved ones. For example, village people work hard in their fields, and they may often gather together at night regardless of age and culture to listen folk music in order to get some relaxation. In addition, young people usually attend in live concert with their friends that is organized by university authorities to unwind their mind from regular stress, which enables them to strengthen bonding. As a result, music not only provide entertainment but also gather people to enjoy the moment.

On the other hand, many people believe that national festivals and theatres also play a vital role in gathering people. This is mainly because many people, including young generations, children and older people of different cultures prefer to join national festivals. For intance, in Bangladesh, every year people of all ages and cultures enjoy Pohela Boishak, which is the most popular national events, to celebrate the happiness of new year. Furthermore, theatres have been providing entertainment to enjoy movies in a large screen for years. Many people prefer to watch movies in cinemas with their families, friends and loved ones. Therefore, people gather together to enjoy national programs and movies in their leisure time.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that national events and theatres along wiht live concerts are effective ways to bring people together of all ages and cultures.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all parts of the prompt, clearly stating your position that while music is effective, other cultural avenues also play a role. Your ideas are relevant and supported by examples, such as the mention of Pohela Boishakh. However, the development of your arguments could be more nuanced. For instance, you could further explain how music specifically bridges the gap between different age groups beyond just 'relaxation'. The response is well-structured, but to reach a higher band, ensure that your supporting examples are more deeply integrated into the analysis of why music is a unique or superior tool for social cohesion compared to other methods.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore' to guide the reader through your arguments. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing, such as 'that is organized by university authorities', where the relative pronoun could be more precisely linked. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear, and the structure supports the development of your argument effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'indisputable', 'crucial role', and 'strengthen bonding'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'listen folk music' (should be 'listen to folk music') and 'attend in live concert' (should be 'attend live concerts'). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, these occasional inaccuracies prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on more precise collocations and ensure that your word forms are consistently accurate in different contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this level. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'To some extend' (should be 'extent'), 'music not only provide' (subject-verb agreement: 'provides'), and 'bring people together of all ages' (word order). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To achieve a higher band, you should aim for more error-free complex sentences and pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, which are currently inconsistent throughout the essay.

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