Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Most of the individuals believe that music will bring the society together and will improve the connectivity of the people from different cultural backgrounds. I completely agree with that statement for some reasons.
The first reason is it will relax the people's minds and improve health. Even though music from different cultures will bring language barriers because of the lyrics of the songs, people can still enjoy the rhythm, melody, and emotions. For instance, most of the people love Korean pop music, but they cannot understand the wordings; however, they enjoy the music.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, which severely limits the development of ideas. While you state your position clearly in the introduction, the supporting arguments are underdeveloped. You mention that music relaxes the mind and bridges cultural gaps, but these points are not sufficiently expanded upon to meet the requirements of an academic essay. To improve, you must provide more detailed explanations and additional examples to fully address the prompt. Because the response is less than 100 words, it fails to provide a complete answer to the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is too short to demonstrate a full range of cohesive devices or effective paragraphing. There is a basic attempt at logical progression, as you introduce a point and provide an example. However, the lack of a conclusion and the brevity of the text make it difficult to assess your ability to manage cohesion over a longer piece of writing. To achieve a higher band, ensure you use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') to connect your ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is adequate for basic communication, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You use some relevant terms like 'cultural backgrounds' and 'language barriers', which is positive. However, the vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and lacks the sophisticated collocations or less common lexical items expected at higher levels. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and avoid wordy phrases like 'most of the individuals' in favor of more concise alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The grammar is generally understandable, but there are noticeable errors that affect the flow. For example, 'Most of the individuals believe' is slightly unnatural; 'Many people believe' would be more idiomatic. You also have minor issues with article usage and phrasing, such as 'bring language barriers'. While you attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, the limited length of the response prevents a full demonstration of your grammatical range. Focus on refining your sentence structure and ensuring subject-verb agreement.
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