Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Few citizens say that music is a best technique of change individuals of different customs and ages together. Some citizen believe that music can change the customs and ages entirely. In this essay we will discuss about music how music change people.
On the hand , music changed the culture however if we are going a few year back then we realize that it's actually changed our culture . For instance in past mostly people are a really into love , romantic listen .But in present time , individuals are really into action and phonk .
On the hand , ages are entirely changed through music .Music completely changed their mind . People utilize their time in listening music . If people are going from their home then they used headphone for listening .I especially utilize my time in listening .If i am alone then i listened music because it relax and clear my mind . I usually listen motivation song that help me motivate me and discipline in my work .
To conclusion that music is curiosity for culture and old people and young people. People are are really into music . Music make a connection with people . I agree that listen music is essential for people in their daily life . It motivate citizen to do their work with hardworking and they feel very excited when they listen music . I consider that music is better way of changing life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt but fails to fully develop the argument regarding how music brings different cultures and ages together. The ideas are somewhat repetitive and lack depth, focusing more on personal listening habits than the broader social impact requested. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which limits the ability to provide a fully developed response. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments are underdeveloped and rely on generalizations rather than specific, relevant examples of how music bridges cultural or generational gaps.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'For instance', 'To conclusion'), they are sometimes used incorrectly or mechanically. The transition between the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion is weak, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. The paragraphing is present but does not always serve to logically group related ideas, leading to a somewhat fragmented reading experience.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Words like 'change', 'music', and 'people' are used frequently without variation. There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'best technique of change individuals' instead of 'best way to bring individuals together' and 'motivation song' instead of 'motivational song'. These errors occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader, though the general meaning remains understandable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('mostly people are a really into', 'I listened music'), article usage, and tense consistency. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are often faulty, such as 'If people are going from their home then they used headphone'. These frequent errors, while not completely impeding communication, are a significant distraction and indicate a lack of control over basic grammatical rules.
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