Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people thought that music is an excellent way of collecting the people of many countries and different ages.
Basically I am agreed by this conversations and according to me music is a well way of getting together the people of many cultures and different ages. Because music is an enjoyable thing for a man and in the world there are many big singers that sings the many songs and some people likes to hear the sad songs because this people are hearth broken
There are many advantages of listening the songs and the first benefits of the music is that when a man starting listening the song. He feels relax after hear this type songs. For example I mostly like the songs of a world best singer and his named is Sidhu Moose Wala and his all songs are giver many lessons about the life and also about self respect and after hearing his songs I feels very relax.
Secondly the music is a good way of collecting the peoples of two separate cultures .In this way people gets many opportunites such as when a man get any song from other country this help him to learn many things about other people and this help him to improve his knowledge.
On other hand some specific disadvantages of the music and firstly some songs are related with many violated words and when a man listen this type song then he became a criminal and after this he become a brave man and this bravery persuaded him for many bad things for example if a man always get this type music then he became a thief
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but lacks depth. While you state your agreement, the arguments are underdeveloped. For example, the point about music helping people learn about other cultures is mentioned but not sufficiently explained or supported with clear logic. The discussion of disadvantages is somewhat tangential and lacks a strong connection to the main prompt regarding cultural and age-related unity. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, clear idea that directly supports your position, and provide more detailed explanations for your claims to meet the requirements of a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'and' and 'this' to link ideas. The transition between the advantages and disadvantages is abrupt. The logical progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by unclear referencing, such as in the final paragraph where the link between listening to music and becoming a 'thief' is not logically sound or clearly explained. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each sentence flows naturally from the previous one will help improve your score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'good way', 'thing', and 'man' where more precise academic vocabulary is required. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'collecting the people' instead of 'bringing people together' and 'violated words' instead of 'offensive lyrics'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to culture, society, and the arts, and practice using synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'he sings the many songs', 'people likes'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'Because music is an enjoyable thing for a man and in the world there are many big singers that sings the many songs'. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.
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