Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people believe music is an excellent medium to interact with the people belonging to diverse cultures and age groups. I totally agree that music is one the best ways that bring harmonly between the people of different nations or cultures. This eassy is going to discuss the reasons that music is a source of bringing people altogether.
Firstly, some songs lyrics show the cultures of their country or area. For instance, in punjabi songs they talk about the
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under-length, containing only 79 words against the 250-word requirement. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the introduction establishes a clear position, the body paragraph is cut off mid-sentence, preventing any meaningful development of ideas or supporting examples. To reach a higher band, you must complete the essay by providing fully developed arguments and relevant examples for both cultural and age-related aspects of the prompt. Currently, the response is too fragmented to demonstrate the ability to develop a coherent argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay attempts to use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly' and 'For instance', but the abrupt ending makes it impossible to assess the overall logical progression or paragraphing. The introduction is clear, but the lack of a body paragraph structure means there is no flow of ideas. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details and a concluding sentence, and use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and contains some errors, such as 'harmonly' (harmony) and 'eassy' (essay). While the word choice is sufficient for the limited content provided, it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You should focus on using more sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'universal language', 'cultural exchange', or 'intergenerational connection', and ensure accurate spelling throughout your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, including 'one the best ways that bring' (one of the best ways that brings) and 'people belonging to diverse cultures' (which is slightly awkward). The sentence structures are simple, and the unfinished nature of the text limits the assessment of your ability to use complex structures. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for basic spelling and punctuation errors. Aim to incorporate a variety of complex sentence structures once you have mastered the basics.
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