Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. I totally agree with this opinion for the following reasons as given below
Firstly i agree with the opinion because music makes a person mood and makes the person feel good and relexed through it and music is a art by which a person nature can be known and people can have mutual understanding and know the vibe through it some songs are the songs that make people connect and make people connect through it some are evergreen song that is liked by every generation and help all ages come together.
Secondly my listening music with different a person gets to learn new things and new test of music which he or she can come up with new taste and new lesson which can make a persons life better and old age people will know new trend and new taste of current generation which make them modern by doing this both generation will able to spend time together. For example there was three man in a family of different generation grandfather, father and his son. All three do not sit together
they only sit at roof sometimes after both father and son came from office and school which makes them sit together and make them understand each other
To sum up I do agree with the opinion that music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together because music help the generation sit ,spend time with there family and learn new thing and make the bond increase.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of music as a unifying force. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding 'mood' and 'mutual understanding' are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. The example provided about the grandfather, father, and son is relevant but remains underdeveloped, as it does not explicitly explain how music facilitates their interaction, only that they sit together. To improve, you should provide more specific, concrete examples or explanations that directly link the mechanism of music to the outcome of social cohesion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'makes the person' and 'make people connect' are used frequently, which disrupts the logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are limited and sometimes misused, such as the transition 'Secondly my listening music', which is grammatically awkward and confusing. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition') would help create a smoother transition between your points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple words like 'good', 'make', and 'thing'. There are instances of word-choice errors, such as 'new test of music' (likely meaning 'taste') and 'a art' (should be 'an art'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more varied and precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'cultural exchange', 'intergenerational bonding', or 'universal language'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'music help the generation'), article usage (e.g., 'a art'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, making them difficult to parse. For example, 'All three do not sit together they only sit at roof sometimes...' requires better sentence boundaries. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and punctuation before attempting more complex structures to ensure your meaning is conveyed accurately.
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