Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Number of people believe music can be a optimal option in order to bring different people of different ages cultures together. i agree with this view point and i will discuss my ideas in the upcoming paragraphs
To start with , music is a universal language that helps to promote all around the globe. Because , music provide humans sound and understanding that helps people of different cultures to appreciate the norms and distinctions of other. So, musi can provide a lot of assistance for bringing people together.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, as it contains only 88 words. This significantly impacts the task achievement, as the ideas are severely underdeveloped and the prompt is not fully addressed. While the student states a position, there is no supporting evidence or depth of argument provided. To improve, the student must expand on their ideas with specific examples and ensure the essay meets the length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is very short, which limits the ability to demonstrate a range of cohesive devices. While there is a basic attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is stunted. The use of linking words like 'To start with' is mechanical. To achieve a higher score, the student needs to use a wider range of cohesive devices (such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast') to link sentences and paragraphs more naturally and ensure that the flow of ideas is logical and easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'optimal option' and 'universal language' are used, but there is a lack of variety and precision. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'promote all around the globe' (which is incomplete) and 'musi' (a spelling error). To improve, the student should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, and ensure that words are used in the correct context to convey meaning more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('music provide humans') and missing articles ('people of different ages cultures'). The sentence structures are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. There are also punctuation errors, such as the space before the comma in 'To start with ,'. To improve, the student should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles, while also attempting to incorporate more complex sentence structures.
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