Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is undeniable that music has made a wide space in people's heart. In this regards, it is believed that music is a efficient way of uniting people from different cultures and ages. I agree to a large extent with this notion due to many reasons which will be mentioned in forthcoming fragments in a logical conclusion.
To begin with, there are several possibilities for music being a good way of uniting people of different culture and ages. The prime one is that, it provides information
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required word count of 250 words, reaching only 86 words. Because the essay is incomplete and stops abruptly after the introduction and the start of the first body paragraph, the task is not addressed in its entirety. The position is stated, but there is no development of ideas or supporting evidence. To improve, you must ensure you complete the full structure of an essay, including at least two well-developed body paragraphs and a conclusion, to allow for a full exploration of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is too short to demonstrate a clear logical progression or effective paragraphing. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'To begin with' and 'In this regards', the text is cut off before these can be used to build a coherent argument. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraph is mechanical. To achieve a higher score, you need to write full paragraphs that link ideas logically and use a wider range of cohesive devices to connect sentences and arguments smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally appropriate for the topic, such as 'undeniable' and 'notion'. However, there are some inaccuracies, such as 'made a wide space in people's heart' (should be 'has a special place in people's hearts') and 'a efficient' (should be 'an efficient'). The range is limited due to the brevity of the response. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure articles (a/an) are used correctly. Expanding your writing will naturally allow you to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but the limited length makes it difficult to assess your full range. There are grammatical errors, such as 'In this regards' (should be 'In this regard') and 'different culture' (should be plural 'cultures'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they indicate a lack of control over basic grammatical agreement and pluralization. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of singular and plural nouns.
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