Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is argued that music acts as a bridge between people of various culture and ages. I completely agree with the idea that people living in a different culture and ages can come closer through music.

There are a number of reasons why i believe music is a good option to gather people of different tradition and ages. One possible reason is that music is admired all over the world and each country have their special kind of music in which they try to portays their culture. For instance, during FIFA worldcup every host country launch music where they shows their tradition. A famous song Waka Waka sang by Sakira was launched during FIFA worldcup 2010 where the culture and tradition of South Africa was finely portrayed. Furthermore, music has a variety of sector like Jazz, Classical, Salsa etc. These music helps to bring individuals together.

In addition, music is loved by all ages of people. I remember my grandmother used to listen Rabindra Sangeet in her leisure time. Often i gave company to her and she explained me the value of those song. It helped a lot to create an incredible bond with my grandparents. Finally, some music are timeless and these are listened by all aged people. For example, 'Amar Poran Jaha Chai' is song written by Rabindranath Tagore is adimed by individual from teenager to elders, merging classic and contemporary style.

In conclusion, considering the factors discussed above, I believe people of various cultures and ages can be brought together by music.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, clearly stating a position in favor of music as a unifying force. The ideas are relevant, such as the role of music in cultural representation and its ability to bridge generational gaps. However, the development is somewhat limited; for instance, the explanation of how different genres like Jazz or Salsa bring people together is brief and lacks depth. While the examples provided (FIFA World Cup, Rabindra Sangeet) are pertinent, the essay would benefit from more detailed analysis to fully explore the 'extent' of the agreement. Overall, the response is clear and maintains a consistent position throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two main arguments: cultural unity and generational connection. Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition', and 'For instance' are used to link ideas, although some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The progression of ideas is generally smooth, though the connection between the mention of specific genres and the broader argument about cultural unity could be more explicitly stated to improve the flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, with some attempts at topic-specific language like 'portrayed', 'timeless', and 'contemporary'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'gather people' instead of 'bring people together', 'variety of sector' instead of 'variety of genres', and 'all ages of people' instead of 'people of all ages'. While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the precision and sophistication of the writing, preventing it from reaching a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('each country have', 'some music are'), missing articles ('during FIFA worldcup'), and incorrect verb forms ('she explained me' instead of 'explained to me'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor slips throughout. While the meaning is always clear, the frequency of these errors indicates that the writer has not yet achieved the level of control required for a higher band score, where the majority of sentences should be error-free.

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