Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
We are provided with a very controversial topic, whether music is a good way of brining people together or not. As we know that music is a form of spiritually to some people and at the same time it's religiously forbidden in most of the societies. Music provides serenity and tranquility to most of the depressed persons and a source of expressing their emotions and mixed up thoughts. However, when we discuss about the other perspect of it ,there are introverts and autistic members who have some sort of allergy to music.
According to my perspective, I completely disagrees with the fact the music can bring people of different cultures and ages together. Music has different forms, lyrics, tones and every person has its own taste. If we discuss it more religiously we will come to the point that music is strictly prohibited in Islam .History shows how much Muslims are reserves when it come to their religion. So, we cannot connect to the Muslims ,when it comes to music.
Moreover, every culture has a different language and values. As a Punjabi, it is very difficult for me to understand a Sindhi and Balochi and I will never be able to build a connection with these peoples. Punjabis speaks Punjabi and Urdu, while Balochi speaks Pashto ,that's a quite tough task to understand each other cultural language
Every ethnicity has its own values and terms and we respect their ideas and how they demonstrate their cultural. Furthermore, for me it is quite challenging to overcome a language barrier. So, as far as my point of view is concerned, I completely dobject with the given topic
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position, but the development of ideas is limited and relies on generalizations. While you provide reasons for your disagreement, the arguments regarding religious prohibition and language barriers are somewhat narrow and do not fully explore the complexities of the topic. The essay would benefit from more balanced reasoning or a broader perspective on how music functions as a universal language, even if you ultimately disagree with the premise. The ideas are presented but lack the depth required for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', 'So'). There are instances where the logical flow between sentences is slightly disjointed, particularly in the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the progression of ideas could be smoother to ensure that each point builds effectively upon the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision expected at higher levels. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'spiritually' used as a noun, 'mixed up thoughts', and 'dobject'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the presence of these inaccuracies limit the score. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical form.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('Punjabis speaks', 'Balochi speaks'), incorrect word forms ('reserves' instead of 'reserved'), and punctuation errors. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and affect the overall fluency of the writing. Increasing the accuracy of basic grammatical structures and refining the use of complex sentences will help improve this score.
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