Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Music is a art form which connect different peoples all around the world. I agree with this opinion because many times people don't know any language but they connect each other with the help of music. Also I prefer to listen different types of music in my daily routine which helps me to reduce my stress.
Firstly, there are many different types of music all around the world. People often listen music when they travel or whenever they are free form there work. Also, people sing different type of song on the festivals. Furthermore, many times people don't able to understand the music lyrics but they love rhythm of the songs and they just remember this songs. For example, in global universities students don't understand each other languages but they just connect with each other with the help of music.
Secondly, Music help us to know different culture all around the world and because of this reason people start communication with each other. Also, some times people become frustrated at there work place, music helps to release there stress and keep there mind fresh so it's help them to better concentrate on their task. Furthermore, nowadays traditional music become popular among the both younger and older generation, which helps them to stay connect with each other. For example, on festival time people often come together and sing traditional music together.
In conclusion, although music is a good way to bringing people together if they are from different cultures and ages. I agree with this point because people often start communication because of the music and it helps them to know about different culture all around the world.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear agreement with the statement. The ideas are relevant, such as the role of music in overcoming language barriers and its function in social bonding during festivals. However, the development is somewhat limited. For instance, the point about stress reduction is only tangentially related to the core prompt of 'bringing people together.' The essay would benefit from more specific, extended examples rather than general statements. While the position is consistent, the supporting arguments lack the depth required for a higher band score, as some points are repetitive or under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' and 'In conclusion' are used to structure the text. However, the use of these devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'they just remember this songs,' where the pronoun reference is slightly awkward. While the progression of ideas is generally logical, the transitions between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother to improve the overall flow of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'connect different peoples' (should be 'people'), 'free form there work' (should be 'from their'), and 'sing different type of song' (should be 'types of songs'). The range is limited to common, everyday language, and there is little attempt to use less common or more sophisticated lexical items. To improve, you should focus on collocations and ensure that word forms (singular/plural) are used correctly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Music help us'), incorrect use of articles, and confusion between 'there' and 'their.' Additionally, there are errors in sentence construction, such as 'many times people don't able to understand.' While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and detract from the overall quality of the writing. A greater focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy is necessary.
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