Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Firstly music is a part of life the reason is it give as piece fill mind and relax and calm mind . When we stress or fell tiered on that time we can listen the music it give some relaxation mind . We also use the music on special occasion it may be a wedding, birthday party ,or type of ceremony etc.

So my suggestion is music is good way to make our mind relax it is part of life and we also used the music on particular occasion which give the mood of party and music change the environment according to the occasion .There are time of advantage of listening music and disadvantage is that when we go through the study it makes as distraction which go the disadvantage for students. But for the student how are preparing for any kind of exam they can listen the music and encouraging by listening the motivational song.

music is a part of life it give as little bit relaxation of life which are essential for individual . according to me i dont have any kind of interesting in music but some time i listen for motive us may be it is a essential for me .

And when ever my kids also listen the music for the entertainment which are important for the kids .

so this is the some points of listening music at different generation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to fully address the prompt. While it touches on music, it does not adequately discuss how music brings people of different cultures and ages together, which is the core of the task. Instead, the essay focuses on personal relaxation and the benefits/drawbacks of music for students. The position is unclear, and the ideas are not developed in relation to the prompt's specific focus on cultural and generational unity. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which significantly impacts the ability to develop a coherent argument. To improve, you must ensure every paragraph directly answers the specific question asked.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. Ideas are presented in a fragmented manner, and there is a lack of effective paragraphing to separate distinct points. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used incorrectly, making the flow of the essay disjointed. For example, the transition between discussing relaxation and the disadvantages of music for students is abrupt and lacks a logical link. The use of referencing is also weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended argument. Improving the use of linking words and structuring your essay into clear introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs is essential.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, often relying on simple words like 'good', 'part of life', and 'music'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'give as piece fill mind' (likely meaning 'gives peace of mind') and 'fell tiered' (likely meaning 'feel tired'). These errors occasionally impede communication. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas or discuss the topic with any precision. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to culture, society, and human connection, and practice using these words in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often distort meaning. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence structure. For instance, 'it give as piece fill mind' and 'the student how are preparing' demonstrate a lack of control over basic grammatical structures. The essay relies almost entirely on simple sentences, with very few attempts at complex structures, and those that are attempted are usually grammatically incorrect. Punctuation is also inconsistent. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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