Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is often argued by some people that the music industry has a massive impact on bringing people to one stage from different areas and ages. Although some people might disagree, I completely agree. Not only because of cultural exchange and universal connection, but also as a bridge between generational gaps.

There are multiple benefits associated with the singing industry. Firstly, cultural exchange is a leading benefit of this development. As people learn new traditions and histories about societies, when they listen to foreign style music. Take the best example of England, in recent days there most people have knowledge about different cultures from all over the world, mainly because in back end 20th century, a lot of singers went there to do concerts, and all of the musicians came from different cultures, like Ustad Nusrat Fateh Ali Khan from Pakistan. Thus, it's proven that music brings people together from different cultures.

Secondly, universal connections are another major benefit of this activity. As artists perform around the world and share their culture and emotions through singing, people recognize their unique creativity. For instance, artists from Punjab, have a lot of connections in the world through their performance in musical industry, even Diljit Dosanjh gained massive recognition. The President of Canada asked him on stage, I really like your songs, even though he is from another country and culture. Hence, the singing sector has a positive impact in terms of links.

Finally, music is a bridge between generations is beneficial. As older or younger groups enjoy the same songs and concerts together, helping them understand each other.

To sum up, I believe that music is unique in its capacity to create shared experiences between people, irrespective of culture and age.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have clearly stated your position and addressed the prompt by discussing both cultural and generational aspects. The ideas are relevant, though the development of the third paragraph is quite brief compared to the others. To reach a higher band, ensure that every point is supported with a clear explanation or a more detailed example. For instance, the final point about generational gaps is mentioned but not fully explored. Overall, you have addressed all parts of the task with a consistent position throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, and you use transition signals like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'To sum up' to guide the reader. However, some cohesive devices are used in a slightly mechanical or repetitive way. Additionally, the referencing in the second paragraph ('in back end 20th century') is a bit unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'cultural exchange', 'universal connection', and 'generational gaps'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'singing industry' (a more natural term would be 'music industry') and 'in back end 20th century'. You attempt to use less common vocabulary, but these occasional errors in collocation prevent a higher score. Focusing on learning natural word pairings will help you express your ideas with more precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. For example, 'As people learn new traditions... when they listen to foreign style music' is a sentence fragment. There are also issues with article usage ('the best example of England') and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to keep the score in the 6.0 range. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of complex sentence structures.

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