Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Some people believe that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together but some people says the music can be listen to related the ages . young person can be listen the young generation music . In my point of view there is no any song that can be related to the ages . Every people has own choice to listen what kind of music.
Many people say music is the best way to bringing people of different ages and cultures together . It is a good thought but there are many countries and there own languages . In this type of countries can be listen music in his languages
But on the other side some people can not be agree because they thought music is the best way that can be spoke by own languages . In all the worlds there are many coke studios and many famous singers. for example Nusrat Fateh Ali he is a big singer in the world in my point of view because most of the countries people can be like his music . Sidhu Moose Wala is the biggest singer in the Punjabi industry . Most of the people can be like his rapes and songs
In my opinion music is the good way to collects the people of different cultures and ages . In my point of view there is the big example in a family son, father and grandfather can be listen the one of the music and can be enjoy a lot of fun .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether music brings people of different cultures and ages together. A position is presented, stating that music does connect people across cultures and generations, and some supporting examples are provided, such as Coke Studios and artists like Nusrat Fateh Ali and Sidhu Moose Wala, as well as a family example. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive, and some sentences, such as 'some people says the music can be listen to related the ages', are confusing or contradictory. The ideas remain somewhat under-developed and lack extension. Therefore, the response aligns best with a Band 5 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into several paragraphs, showing some structural organisation. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and the logical flow is frequently disrupted by abrupt transitions and confusing sentences. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurately used (e.g., 'But on the other side some people can not be agree'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph cohesion is weak, leading to difficulties for the reader in following the train of thought. This performance reflects the Band 4 descriptor.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, such as the repeated use of 'people', 'music', and 'different cultures and ages'. There are noticeable errors in word choice, form, and collocation, for example, 'can be listen', 'bring people of different ages and cultures together' (repeated verbatim), and 'like his rapes' (presumably meaning raps). These errors and limited range cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher band, placing it firmly at Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writer demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempt complex structures that are faulty (e.g., 'there is no any song that can be related to the ages', 'In this type of countries can be listen music in his languages'). Errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions are frequent throughout the text, distorting meaning at times and causing frequent difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to a Band 4 level.
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