Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In today's era music playes an important role in each and every humans life whereas Without music people fell emptyness in their life. It is noticeable that music is used as a medioum of communication and express the emmotions to other people science historic era. Howerever some people belive that music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. Further this essay will discuss its advantage, disadvants and in the in the end I will mention my point of view.
It is ture that music connects people of different age groupe as well as different culture together. Every person feels calm and connected while listening the music. People connects them self with the musice and some time they even don't relise their age and sank in the flow of the redhum of the music. It is mainly depended on the choice of the songs and the company of the people for example :- song sang by the late Indian musicion Jagjit sing. He was well known for "Gazals". Whenever he sang any Gazal it fells like real exprience and each and evey word is feled so deep that I can not express in words.
Secondly music don't have any limit or barriour. It can be heard by any one of any age group. some time some singers exprience their thoughts into music and people can lear from it. Music can motivate some one and some time people can make their hard time more easier by hearing the music.
In conclusion I stongly agree with the statement that music is a way of brimging people together from different culture and age group.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether music brings people of different cultures and ages together, maintaining a clear personal position of strong agreement. However, the development of ideas is limited. For example, the introduction promises to discuss 'advantage' and 'disadvants', but the body paragraphs focus entirely on the advantages and fail to discuss any disadvantages. Furthermore, the examples provided, such as the mention of Jagjit Singh, are somewhat generalised and under-developed, lacking detailed explanation of how his music specifically bridges cultural or generational divides. As a result, the task is only partially addressed, which aligns with the Band 5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay displays some overall organization, divided into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and uses basic cohesive markers such as 'Secondly' and 'In conclusion'. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression and logical flow between sentences. The transition from the general premise in the introduction to the body paragraphs feels abrupt, particularly with the erroneous preview of disadvantages that never appear. Referencing is sometimes unclear, as seen in phrases like 'People connects them self with the musice'. Paragraphing is attempted, but cohesion is generally mechanical and inadequate, corresponding to a Band 5 level.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally strain the reader. Examples of inaccurate forms include 'playes' for plays, 'medioum' for medium, 'emmotions' for emotions, 'science' for since, 'groupe' for group, 'sank' for sink, 'redhum' for rhythm, 'depended' for depends, 'musicion' for musician, 'fells' for feels, 'feled' for filled, 'barriour' for barrier, and 'brimging' for bringing. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'motivation' and 'communication', the high density of basic spelling and lexical errors places this response firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. Attempts at complex sentences often result in faulty grammar and punctuation, such as 'In today's era music playes an important role in each and every humans life whereas Without music people fell emptyness in their life.' There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement ('music don't have'), tense consistency, and article usage throughout the text. These frequent errors cause occasional difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5 descriptors.
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