Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Despite rapidly progressing in the field of music and its psychological impacts, some people still argue that music is the best way of bringing people of various cultures and ages together. I partly agree with this stance that music can be a source of strengthening the bonds between different generations. However, it can raise multiple disputes among people who belong to different cultures.
The primary driving factor of this concept that influences the people is that music can provide a strong linking system to connect the people of diverse traditions and different ages. In addition, by listening to songs and anthems, people can connect themselves with nations, with a greater devotion. A clear illustration of this is provided by several state authorities, who have implemented the strategy of strengthening relationship among their citizens of different ages and cultures by using national music and songs. Therefore, some people believe that music can be a good option for bringing diverse people together.
Conversely, music can be a major concern for the emergence of various conflicts among people of different ages and cultures. These issues can arise due to preference in music, as it varies from young to older individiuals and among different traditions. For instance, developing countries are suffering from poor socio-economic conditions which are caused by disputes, which emerge due to different music tastes among generations and cultures.
I agree that music can strengthen relations among people of different ages and regions. However, I believe that it can be a limit to socio-economic growth of a country due to the disputes arising due to preferences of music consumption.
To conclude, according to some people, listening to the same sort of music can be beneficial as it can reduce the generation gaps. However, from my perspective, it can also introduce multiple conflicts in a society regarding music taste.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing whether music can bring people of different cultures and ages together. You take a clear partial stance in the introduction, agreeing that music strengthens intergenerational bonds while disagreeing that it unifies different cultures due to potential disputes. Your ideas are relevant, though some arguments—such as the claim that developing countries suffer socio-economic ruin due to generation-and-culture music disputes—tend to be somewhat over-generalized and under-developed with specific evidence. Nonetheless, the task is adequately addressed throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay has a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, moving logically from introduction to body paragraphs discussing both sides and concluding with a summary. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In addition', 'A clear illustration of this', and 'Conversely'. However, referencing and cohesion can sometimes feel mechanical or repetitive, and the logical progression occasionally falters when linking musical preferences to socio-economic conditions in developing countries. Overall, the organizational structure is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'psychological impacts', 'intergenerational', 'socio-economic conditions', and 'music consumption'. However, there are some noticeable inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'linking system' instead of 'link' or 'bridge', and a spelling error ('individiuals'). The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate your ideas clearly, but precision could be improved.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including conditional or participial clauses like 'Despite rapidly progressing...' and 'These issues can arise due to...'. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings throughout, such as 'influence the people is that music can provide' and 'it can be a limit to socio-economic growth'. Punctuation is generally acceptable, and errors rarely impede overall communication, placing this securely in the Band 6 territory.
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