Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's world bring people and meet each other has become an important issue. While some people disagree, I firmly agree that a good way of bringing people another religions and ages together is music, because it benefits both individuals and society.

To begin with, one key reason is that listen and forward their favourite music to next person. This is because of music can change their feelings. Which leads to miss and talk each other by music plateforms. Not only does this approach it is very helpfull way of talk to their relatives but it also whose relatives lived in the another country making it a practical solution. For instance, If people listen to music and forward each other they will be meet early. It is clearly showing its positive impact. Therefore, it plays an important role in improving everyday life.

Another reason is that people of different ages have no longer time to come together and meet each other. Although some people believe that people's have different jobs in the different country so they were busy everytime. They have not time for listen music. I find this argument less convincing because job person have 15 to 17 hours for his work. If governments, organisations and individuals work together, music can be achieved more effectively. Only through such efforts can lasting progress be made.

In conclusion, I firmly agree that if people bringing togather they should have listen to music because it not only good for different ages but also different religions. Although some challenges addressed through proper planning and coopration

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether music brings people of different cultures and ages together, taking a clear stance of agreement. However, the development of ideas is severely hindered by lack of clarity and logical progression. For instance, the argument in the second paragraph regarding forwarding music and communicating with relatives abroad is tangentially related to the prompt and lacks deep elaboration. Main ideas are often repetitive or drift into vague assertions, such as claiming that job holders have '15 to 17 hours for his work' which lacks relevance. While all parts of the task are touched upon, the reasoning is underdeveloped and difficult to follow at times. This performance aligns closely with Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the overall progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by incoherent sentences and poor logical connections. While basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Another reason is', and 'In conclusion' are present, referencing and substitution are often faulty or confusing, as seen in phrases like 'Which leads to miss and talk each other by music plateforms.' Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph cohesion breaks down due to abrupt shifts in thought and unclear pronoun references. The flow of the argument is frequently impeded, placing this response at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate, reflecting a limited range that restricts clear communication. The student attempts some topic-related terms like 'cultures', 'religions', and 'music platforms', but word choices and collocations are frequently flawed, such as 'bring people and meet each other', 'listen and forward their favourite music', and 'job person'. There are also frequent issues with word forms and word classes. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey a rudimentary message, errors in spelling and word choice cause strain for the reader, placing it firmly in the Band 5 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, dominated by simple and heavily flawed complex sentence structures. The response contains frequent, dense grammatical errors that regularly impede comprehension. Examples include subject-verb agreement errors ('people's have different jobs'), incorrect tense usage ('if people listen to music and forward each other they will be meet early'), and fragmented or incomplete clauses ('Although some challenges addressed through proper planning and coopration'). The high frequency of errors across basic and complex forms restricts the score to Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

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