Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Indivisuals have strong opinion about the Music. Music is the way to connect different background people no matter their age or the different cultures. It is connects, grow the relationships in people's.

First a fall Music is just not a art, It's an emotion, creativity any many more things. Music is the expression of mood, behaviour and psycological part of our brain as a form of love about ourself. Indivisuals having differents life but Music is still on their priorties.

I strongly agrees with this opinion, A BTS is very a famous boy group band in Republic of South Korea. They have strong fan base all over the world, they produce the music and peformes on the stage. they doing world tour In America Europe, Asia. From this example You need notice that their fans from different background, culture, age, gender but the Music connects them in the world tour. they met a lot of people's and becomes friends.The main area is Music ,Music is an love, it's help to relax the mind.

So i Concluded that Music is bring the people together no matter about their age and cultures,it way better to connect new people, enjoy and share our experiences. becomes a good friends.

My personal opinion on this topic is Music is form of love, so that form of love need to spread to people to lovers. learn new cultures, met them. Every different culture has it's own experiences, joy and support. This are the reasons of music, it connects people all over the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task and takes a clear, consistent position in agreement with the prompt ('I strongly agrees with this opinion'). Ideas are extended with a relevant contemporary example using the South Korean group BTS to illustrate how music bridges cultural and generational gaps. However, some arguments lack full depth, and the discussion tends to over-generalise and drift slightly into repetitive statements, such as repeatedly calling music a 'form of love'. While the main points are clearly communicated, the development in certain sections remains limited. This places the performance firmly at Band 6, where all parts of the prompt are addressed, but some ideas are slightly under-developed or repetitive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement, and the writer attempts logical organisation by separating the introduction, body arguments, and conclusion. Paragraphing is used, though paragraph breaks and transitions are occasionally awkward, such as starting with 'First a fall'. Cohesive devices are sometimes faulty or mechanical (e.g., 'So i Concluded that', 'The main area is Music ,Music is an love'). Referencing can also be unclear, as seen in the sudden introduction of BTS without a smooth transitional sentence. Although the general flow allows the reader to follow the train of thought, the mechanical linking and weak paragraph transitions keep this criterion at Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases such as 'psycological part' and 'priorties'. However, there are frequent errors in word choice, spelling, and word formation (e.g., 'Indivisuals', 'First a fall', 'peformes', 'differents', 'an love'). These inaccuracies do not entirely impede communication, as the intended meaning of the sentences usually shines through, but they are noticeable and constrain the lexical score. Because the vocabulary is minimally adequate yet marred by persistent errors, a score of 5.0 is appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak throughout the text. There are frequent basic errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Music is bring the people together', 'Every different culture has it's'), tense usage, and article placement ('A BTS is very a famous boy group band'). Punctuation is also problematic, featuring comma splices and incorrect capitalisation ('Indivisuals', 'Music'). Although some complex structures are attempted, they are frequently faulty, causing some difficulty for the reader. These persistent structural errors place the grammar firmly at Band 5.0.

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