Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Music is an art where everybody gets attached to enjoy the lyrics of various types and inorder to enhance the mood.Fewer believes that different cultures and ages is the right way to bring people together.
I will agree with the given statement.
Firstly,the humans life are associated with certain aspects of music,dance,arts,etc this is part of culture and traditions.Fewer folks are enjoy the special occasions such as celebrating the events fevestivals ,in religious worship to bring the celebration atmosphere and gathering Between the people will enhance the bond cultures and people together.There are huge playlist are available how the in the online platforms according to the occasion.Additionally, the people are celebrating the Christmas event there are songs available in the album to play and enjoy the event.Where the people are easily involved and takes participation.
On the other hand,in this modern era the students from school to universities are actively involving in culture activities at atleast once in their academic year from calendar on this day the peers are participating in dance program by switching which are more feasible these type of programs will make the people to gather together and with all the age groups with out any discrimination will enjoy the event.
Take an example,in India country every year during the festival of Diwali everyone switches to music of their homegod and celebrate with family members and worshiping all the traditional cultures.
It aslo bring positive energy in them.
However, these music will definitely bring the bond the assemble the people to enjoy the circumstances.I strongly believes in this music is a good way fir bringing people of different culture and ages together .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the task partially, presenting a clear position that music brings people of different cultures and ages together, but the ideas are limited and under-developed. While the writer attempts to support the argument with examples such as Diwali celebrations in India and school cultural events, these examples lack sufficient expansion and depth. Certain arguments, such as the mention of online playlists, feel disconnected and tangential rather than fully integrated into a cohesive line of reasoning. To move higher, the response would need to extend and fully develop its main ideas with more robust, specific examples and maintain a clearer, more consistent line of argument throughout every paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is some basic organisation with attempts at paragraphing, but the essay lacks a clear overall progression. Paragraph breaks and transitions are occasionally awkward, such as the sudden shift between the introduction and body paragraphs, and cohesive devices are frequently repetitive, inaccurate, or inadequate. For instance, transitional phrases like 'Firstly', 'On the other hand', and 'However' are used mechanically and sometimes applied where the logical relationship they signal does not fit the flow of ideas. Pronoun referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it harder for the reader to follow the exact connections between concepts. Improving cohesion requires more natural transitions and a clearer logical structure linking each paragraph to the central thesis.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey basic meaning. The writer attempts some less common terms and attempts to discuss cultural concepts, but there are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word formation, such as 'fevestivals', 'homegod', and 'inorder'. These lexical inaccuracies and occasional spelling slips sometimes cause minor difficulty for the reader in grasping the exact intent. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to expand their range of vocabulary, use less common lexical items with greater precision regarding style and collocation, and ensure correct word forms and spelling throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences or attempts at complex forms that are frequently faulty. There are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, articles, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as in the phrases 'the humans life are associated' and 'in India country'. These persistent errors can cause difficulty for the reader and obscure meaning in places. To reach a higher standard, the writer must incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence structures with greater accuracy, ensuring better control over basic grammatical agreements, tense consistency, and punctuation.
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